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Perfect Path

When God made me,
He must have seen my weaknesses.
He made the path perfect
so I could meet you.

I give you everything I have..
All I am.
Every breath I take is just for you.
I wanna spend forever with you,
and only you.
You'll be the only one I kiss goodnight.
Every morning, I wish I could wake up next to you.
Every night, I wish I could feel you laying by my side.
If I'm just dreaming, please,
don't wake me.
I feel so alive with you.
I love you so much!
My one true love.
Forever, I swear.



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tinkerbubbles said...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 3:11 pm:
its alright. i guess ur poems are lacking a certain originality, and they're pretty darn void of descriptive/figurative language. but u hav a good foundation! u just need practice
 
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dancewritedream13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 18, 2010 at 6:49 pm:
I really like it! The one line that doesn't seem to fit though is "I love you so much!" It's a little less poetic than the rest. Very nice however, and very heartfelt!
 
his_country_girl replied...
May 20, 2010 at 12:20 pm :
yeah, i didn't like that part, but i couldn't think of anything better. haha. and i've kinda changed since this was written and posted. like..my belief in god is nonexsistant.
 
dancewritedream This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 21, 2010 at 6:49 pm :
Well, I know this is months later but comment I will! HaHa. Truely, I am sorry to hear that. My friends and I...we don't know what to think anymore.
 
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