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The fish
said
ride
the humpback
turtles
under
the waves
below dreaming
mermaids,
and
the magic music
that they
play.





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_AMZ_ said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 1:05 am
This is delightful to read! It is so whimsical. I love it because the words actually resemble the flow of the poem to me...the lines and rhyme fluctuate like ocean waters and waves (i.e.:short lines vs. long lines, and inconsistent rhyme). I LOVE that. Not only did you create a poem that was a great read but it is also packed with great literary devices that would make for a good discussion about its meaning.
 
_AMZ_ replied...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 1:08 am
it's like a rolling flow. I do not know if you meant it to be that way, but to me, the poem visually and verbally is like a rolling wave. You did a beautiful job, and I enjoy your poetry so much.
 
JesusIsMySavior777 replied...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 8:26 pm

thank you so much i will check out ure work. (ive seen ure artwork b4) and yes, i did mean it to roll like a wave. im glad u noticed that ;)

ps:jlu

 
sleeplessdreamer said...
Jun. 30, 2010 at 10:27 pm

Ah! I love this. It's so perfect and simple and... ugh. Ok, I love it and after I finish writing this, am going to read it again.

Maybe two more times...

 
Evelyn replied...
Jul. 1, 2010 at 1:44 pm
THANK YOU!!! LOVE URE WORK!!!
 
Tonnie6 said...
Jun. 22, 2010 at 8:45 pm
It's so simple, I love it. :)
 
Evelyn replied...
Jun. 28, 2010 at 1:11 pm

omb! thank you so much for commenting on my article! i really appreciate the feedback. i will take a look at your pieces as well. thanks again

JLU

 
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