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November 8, 2009
By TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM, Highland Village, Texas
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TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM, Highland Village, Texas
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The fish
said
ride
the humpback
turtles
under
the waves
below dreaming
mermaids,
and
the magic music
that they
play.

© Brittany B., Louisville, KY

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i used a little fun thing called MagnePoem, if u like poetry look it up and buy! it's lots of fun!
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TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 8:26 pm
TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM, Highland Village, Texas
30 articles 6 photos 203 comments

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"See in what peace a Christian can die." - Joseph Addison
"How come everyone will come to your funeral, but nobody will come see you when you are living?"

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thank you so much i will check out ure work. (ive seen ure artwork b4) and yes, i did mean it to roll like a wave. im glad u noticed that ;)

ps:jlu

_AMZ_ BRONZE said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 1:08 am
_AMZ_ BRONZE, Hemet, California
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it's like a rolling flow. I do not know if you meant it to be that way, but to me, the poem visually and verbally is like a rolling wave. You did a beautiful job, and I enjoy your poetry so much.
_AMZ_ BRONZE said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 1:05 am
_AMZ_ BRONZE, Hemet, California
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This is delightful to read! It is so whimsical. I love it because the words actually resemble the flow of the poem to me...the lines and rhyme fluctuate like ocean waters and waves (i.e.:short lines vs. long lines, and inconsistent rhyme). I LOVE that. Not only did you create a poem that was a great read but it is also packed with great literary devices that would make for a good discussion about its meaning.
TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 1 2010 at 1:44 pm
TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM, Highland Village, Texas
30 articles 6 photos 203 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See in what peace a Christian can die." - Joseph Addison
"How come everyone will come to your funeral, but nobody will come see you when you are living?"

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THANK YOU!!! LOVE URE WORK!!!
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 30 2010 at 10:27 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Ah! I love this. It's so perfect and simple and... ugh. Ok, I love it and after I finish writing this, am going to read it again.

Maybe two more times...

TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 28 2010 at 1:11 pm
TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM, Highland Village, Texas
30 articles 6 photos 203 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See in what peace a Christian can die." - Joseph Addison
"How come everyone will come to your funeral, but nobody will come see you when you are living?"

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omb! thank you so much for commenting on my article! i really appreciate the feedback. i will take a look at your pieces as well. thanks again

JLU

Tonnie6 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 22 2010 at 8:45 pm
Tonnie6 BRONZE, Lynnwood, Washington
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It's so simple, I love it. :)