Sensitive Am I

August 30, 2009
By ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
17 articles 4 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato


Tears I cry are not tears at all
Dejection I feel has made me fall
I feel no wind, but yet chills occur
Hands pat my shoulders, but yet I feel no comfort
This vaporous state I've brought myself in
But nothing's pushed me, yet I begin
Big open fields, where sun does not shine
Quills I feel prick me from behind
Yet no matter where I turn, I'm always looking back
Not understanding myself, yet feeling bad
I lay in my room with this feeling of ennui
Staring at my wall with tears of despondency
As I watch my ceiling fan create circles of trust
I think of how I could not be the same, cause I've already given up
Tears I cry are not tears at all
They're regrettings of past actions I happen to recall
I feel mortification and I don't know why
I don't understand why they're not tears I cry
Or why dolor is a feeling that describes my life
Or how fast all those good days went by
I guess you could call this letting go
I guess you could call this an entangling hole
But I guess I'll never understand why
I'm trapped inside, but I've finally realized
That this is what I am, Sensitive Am I



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on Nov. 7 2011 at 7:24 pm
Dragonfly_Girl PLATINUM, Pleasant Hill, California
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

This is fabulous! I can completely relate!! I wish I could write this well! It would mean a lot to me if maybe you could check out my work and give me advice?? THANK YOU AND YOU ARE TALENTED!! <3

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on Jul. 23 2011 at 5:20 pm
t-time24, Monticello, Minnesota
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i really love this poem n totally relate to how ur feeling in this.. u just explained perfectly how i feel most of the time.. u truely are an amazin writer :)

on Jan. 11 2011 at 6:02 pm
I.Hope.You.Dance. SILVER, Somewhere In, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"I would define, in brief the poetry of words as the rhythmical creation of beauty!" -Edgar Allan Poe

"...All little girls should be told they're pretty, even if they aren't.” -Marilyn Monroe!

I really love this poem? Check mine out and comment please?

on Jan. 1 2011 at 7:23 pm
Pia_HainzCiavelli SILVER, St.James, Other
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Such is liife :)

ure so right , please check out my poem "Kuraitani" comment and rate please =)

on Jun. 5 2010 at 11:48 pm
poeticjunkie93 GOLD, Chesterfield, Missouri
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I can totally relate to this poem.I know exactly how you feel and how terrible it sometimes feels to carry such a sensitive soul. A lot of the times you dont even know why your upset either and why things still affect you. But like I always say, being a poet is both a blessing and a curse!

on Mar. 22 2010 at 9:09 am
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
17 articles 4 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

thanx guys! u all r awesome:)

kysh15 said...
on Mar. 21 2010 at 1:34 pm
kysh15, Edmonds, Washington
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this is bueatiful, i cant think of a word strong enough to describe it!

on Feb. 16 2010 at 7:24 pm
musiclover114 SILVER, Woodstock, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about finding yourself. Life is about creating yourself.

born an original, why die a copy?

BEAUTIFUL and AMAZING!!!!!!!!! i read ur comment on another article asking people to read and comment on this piece and im very glad i did!!!!! very very very good!!!!!!ur voice comes out very clearly and this piece has a good flow and rythm:)

on Feb. 15 2010 at 9:51 am
PoetLaureate07 PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing..

BEAUTIFUL!!!

on Dec. 25 2009 at 12:19 pm
treegirl BRONZE, Newton, Massachusetts
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Great job! I love the flow and rhythm of this poem, how the images and words build upon eachother, yet the line "Tears I cry are not tears at all" keeps repeating itself. You're a great writer; keep it up!

on Nov. 22 2009 at 4:05 pm
FadetoFluorescent SILVER, Cincinnati, Ohio
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"As I watch my ceiling fan create circles of trust"

I love that line. It's so poetic and image-inhancing :)

The over-all poem had a lot of feeling and rythm, and your vocabulary was exeotic and artsy. Kudos! <3

on Nov. 22 2009 at 11:46 am
firstsnowfalls DIAMOND, Marcellus, New York
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thats annoying :) try one more time? in the search box or this link:
http ://www.teenink .com /opinion/spirituality_religion/article/145498/The-Pyramids/

on Nov. 20 2009 at 7:05 pm
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
17 articles 4 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

yeah dats wat i did but i can't find it :( sorry maybe u should resubmit it

on Nov. 20 2009 at 3:02 pm
firstsnowfalls DIAMOND, Marcellus, New York
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maybe its not under poetry? but im pretty sure its on the site SOMEWHERE. try clicking on my name, and then looking in the work. idk... thanks for trying! :)

on Nov. 20 2009 at 2:04 pm
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
17 articles 4 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

how come I can't see ur poem? it's not in there :(

on Nov. 20 2009 at 2:01 pm
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
17 articles 4 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

lol thanks :)

on Nov. 19 2009 at 7:51 pm
firstsnowfalls DIAMOND, Marcellus, New York
51 articles 6 photos 105 comments
This is beautiful! I love the flow, and how your voice really comes through. I think at parts you are a little repetitive, but other than that, great! You can really feel the emotion. would you or anyone else mind reading my poem The Pyramids? i was just trying out something new and i need some feedback, from people other than just close friends. Thanks! :)

on Nov. 19 2009 at 7:11 pm
hi,randomperson. GOLD, Fall City, Washington
13 articles 2 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is not forbidden but it is a risky to fall into,but if its real-than you should stay true. Love is a funny thing,it cant be bought like a diamond ring. Love is greif and pain, you feel lost and insane.Love is a wonderful treasure,keep it forever

I EFFIN LOVE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!(((((: GOOD WORK GIRL!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Nov. 19 2009 at 10:13 am
AndThisIsReal PLATINUM, Broadalbin, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Dans chaque fil il y a un debut.

I have gotten the same corrective critisism about trying to break y ryhme scheme and try free verse. I suppose I would suggest the same thing to you. But I think it flows really well none the less. This is a great poem and I really lie your choice of words.

on Nov. 13 2009 at 8:56 pm
Internallybeautiful BRONZE, Tilson, New York
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass is it about learning how to dance in the rain"

I have read this 4 times now and i can really hear your voice in this !!!!!;) keep it up!!! ;)


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