Room 214, Oncology MAG

By Unknown, Unknown, Unknown

   The hypnotic tapping of the rain on the window lulls the girl to sleep

She fights to stay awake

Her eyelids droop like the grungy, old curtains that hang in the window

From her chair, the girl sees a lone bird in its nest, shivering in the

wind

The door swings open, accompanied by a loud creak

The young woman in white, aged by grief, quietly shuffles in

She shakes her head in pity and touches the girl's shoulder

The young girl looks into the woman's face, knowing what to expect

The woman speaks, but the young girl does not bother to listen

Clutching her beloved locket, the one given to her by her mother, she

mourns





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on Nov. 13 2013 at 6:53 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Inspiring in a messed up way. First off, the one thing that stuck out to me was the separation of the word "wind" from the rest of its sentence. That, right there, got me. I saw that and reread the sentence over and over, and chills just ran up and down my spine. Very cool. Your wording at the beginning is really quite nice.. very descriptive and I could relate to the drooping eyelids.. (: I know this got into the magazine and all [congrats btw (: ], but I think that the last line, beginning with "Clutching her beloved locket..." could be improved. I just felt like that as a last sentence was sort of a let-down. I see an opaque message through the last sentence, but I feel like this poem could deliver a much more significant message. You don't even have to delete that sentence... I'd just add something on at the end that really strikes a chord.

on May. 28 2010 at 8:56 pm
dancewritedream SILVER, S. Dartmouth, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Masquerading as a normal person day after day is exhausting."

sad and lovely! very nice!

 



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