Inspiring in a messed up way. First off, the one thing that stuck out to me was the separation of the word "wind" from the rest of its sentence. That, right there, got me. I saw that and reread the sentence over and over, and chills just ran up and down my spine. Very cool. Your wording at the beginning is really quite nice.. very descriptive and I could relate to the drooping eyelids.. (: I know this got into the magazine and all [congrats btw (: ], but I think that the last line, beginning with "Clutching her beloved locket..." could be improved. I just felt like that as a last sentence was sort of a let-down. I see an opaque message through the last sentence, but I feel like this poem could deliver a much more significant message. You don't even have to delete that sentence... I'd just add something on at the end that really strikes a chord.

sad and lovely! very nice!