fire candy

June 19, 2009
you are my fire candy
i cant get enough
though you scorch my throat
you are
my sweet yet hurtful candy
that will eventually
burn my heart
i love this candy
this fire candy
but it is killing me
and you are cremating my heart
right before you kill me

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Hay_Wire This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 11, 2009 at 10:04 am
wow. that is unlike anythign ive ever read before. and kinda sick, but in a good true way. sorry. i sound odd XD great job
~purple_musician~ replied...
Nov. 11, 2009 at 3:08 pm
thank you! :)
EdytD said...
Sept. 6, 2009 at 9:13 pm
This is actually neat. I think you could play with this, and almost describe your tongue, or your stomach, being burnt as the candy travels through your system. just an idea.
I'd love if you took a look at my poetry; thanks!
OLIVIA!!!!! replied...
Sept. 7, 2009 at 11:00 am
thank you i like your poetry too.
im also a fan of edgar allen poe.
OLIVIA!!!!! said...
Jul. 6, 2009 at 11:21 pm
i think this poem is amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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