June 20, 2009
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I close my eyes as my room begins to spin
I pull my knees up and tuck in my chin
Silent sobs escape from my throat
I wish I could escape too, by train or by boat
I'd travel to another, better world
Where I'd claim the land and have my flag unfurled
The rules will be mine and I'll keep my parents away
My buried laughter will again light the day.
Tonight I hide like I often do
Under my blankets soaking my pillow right through
My tears are spilling non-stop again
If this pain will end, I wonder when
I cry until I fall asleep
That's the only time I do not weep.
I hope when I wake up I'll be somebody new
Like one who has a happy family to love you
A father who'll help and refrain from threats
A mother who has children without regrets
Perhaps even a sibling or two
Giving me somebody to talk to
But until that miracle somehow comes true
I'm stuck with horrible days to live through.

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sasssgirrrl22 said...
Mar. 21, 2010 at 7:03 pm
this is amazing.
gr8 job!!
even though its very sad, it really can
move the reader.
plz keep it up!
kookymnstr said...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 6:22 pm
I'm in love with all your poems, they are really good.
Sunshine:D said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 12:09 pm
LiFiK said...
Dec. 14, 2009 at 8:42 am
I'm feeling this one. Idk why but its just somethin about sorrow and gloom in petry that attracts me to it, this poem is great
darkprincess said...
Dec. 12, 2009 at 11:47 pm
thanks for the comments, but my poems r nothing compared to ur's. U r amazing!
MiuBlaze This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 14, 2009 at 8:30 am
Amazing! I am in love with your poetry, haha. Mind if I start a fan club? :)
iluvfruitbasket3 said...
Aug. 5, 2009 at 4:51 pm
Thanks for commenting on my poem i love this poem its amazing you can tell this poems from your heart
one_of_a_kind_girl said...
Jul. 26, 2009 at 7:45 pm
You are an amazing writer. I can't even find words to describe it.
mallory14 said...
Jul. 24, 2009 at 9:51 pm
i love this poem, i wanted to also thank you for commenting on poem i really like this and i want you to keep writing, because i enjoy reading your poems
aussie65 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 20, 2009 at 5:14 pm
I would also like to thank you for your comment on my poem. i like a lot of your imagery, especially in the 6th and 10th lines. i LOVE the word "unfurled" its not one most people usually uses which is a shame. it fits with the line about escaping by train or boat, because when i think about flags unfurling i always think about old fashioned battle ships. :P
KiraKira said...
Jul. 18, 2009 at 10:34 pm
Thanks for commenting on my story! This poem is beautiful. I love it so much. The end rhyme is perfect, and the picture that this story brings made me cry. I hope that whatever trial that you are going through right now will soon come to pass and that soon you may see the sun once more. :)
xXFadedFlowerXx said...
Jul. 16, 2009 at 12:19 am
Wow, Beautiful poem. You are a great writer. Thanks for the comment on my poem by the way!
cree8ive said...
Jul. 15, 2009 at 7:53 pm
i really like what you did with the rhyme, because a lot of time rhyme makes poetry sound kinda cliche. that really wasn't a problem here though.
carolinet said...
Jul. 15, 2009 at 5:01 pm
This is such a nice poem!
Anne K. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 8, 2009 at 12:01 am
Good rhyming, very emotional. Good job! :)
PS I'm saying thank you for commenting on my poem!
Victoria M. said...
Jul. 6, 2009 at 3:51 am
This is a beautiful poem, and it is obvious that you spoke from the heart. Thank you for allowing me a glimpse into your world and a chance to appreciate what I have in this world: a loving mother and step-dad...and a not so loving sister and brother >.< lol...I hope that whatever pain you are in now will clear up eventually because you deserve every happiness that there is. Good luck, and keep writing!

camille_1441 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 2, 2009 at 12:14 am
I just wanted to thank you SO MUCH for the comment on my poem! I love yours too, I think it has a great meaning about how no matter what life's trials put you through you always need a family and how comforting it is to have one.

Great job! Keep writing!
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