My Dear

June 15, 2009
By Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
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I loved you, my dear
For you yet loved me
Though reproach tore us farther apart

We competed, my dear
In school and in sport
Though you envied me, turned me away

We were perfect, my dear
A match meets a match
Though publicly ‘twas never quite true

I showed you, my dear
My love, my sweet love
Though ‘gainst instinct you ruined our bond

Ne’er more, my dear
Shall we love as we did
Gone are those days, so alas


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on Apr. 13 2010 at 10:21 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

 love it!! :) i like the idea of adding "my dear" and repeating that. it gives it a nice flow and kinda adds a personal twist :) it's a really great piece!! kudos :) 5 stars. would you mind checking out some of my work?

on Jan. 26 2010 at 5:52 am
Rosalie PLATINUM, Maryville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
-you have many to learn but nothing to lose.
-the hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love someone else...
-good girls are bad girls that dont get caught.

i love this!

EdytD SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 11:05 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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Great! I love the repetition of "my dear" in this poem, it made it very fluid. It's very neat - I haven't seen many poems written in this style. Nice job!

Lonleydandy said...
on Jul. 26 2009 at 10:09 pm
Wow, I really like this poem! [Thanks by the way for commenting on my poem "A Fantasy," If I may ask for you to look at some others!] Love the poem!! Keep writing

on Jul. 2 2009 at 2:17 pm
Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
20 articles 8 photos 173 comments
Pinkvolleyballgirl, thanks for commenting on this and my other poem, Dinner of Dreams. Haha, I assure you that when I was commenting on The World We Live In, I was not just "pretending to care, to understand." I mean, I wasn't just commenting to get you to comment on this. And thanks for the advice on my other poem, I'll think about how to make it longer. : )

on Jul. 2 2009 at 5:34 am
xXxFallingTearsxXx GOLD, Cottonwood, Idaho
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amazing poem!!! you are a beautiful poet :)

on Jul. 1 2009 at 11:30 pm
hey_itskatelyn PLATINUM, Willis, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“God, of your goodness, give me yourself; you are enough for me, and anything less that I could ask for would not do you full honour. And if I ask anything that is less, I shall always lack something, but in you alone I have everything”

Hey abigail!

You commented on the piece i wrote called the world we live in. thanks so much for giving your opinion. Anyway, you were talking about incorporating honesty and feeling into writing. I think you did a really great job. The very best way to achieve it is to merely write from your heart. Keep it up:)

Nancy said...
on Jul. 1 2009 at 7:41 pm
This is an awesome poem, Abigail. It is beautiful!


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