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American Dream MAG
so this is where all the dreaming takes me
to a cold, empty reality
with sleep still in my eyes
shivering, confused, I must’ve overslept
now it’s time to wake up
one last yawn, then face the lies
I’m barefoot and the streets are rough
paved with broken glass
but that’s okay
’cause the land is flowing
with milk and honey
bread and butter
and justice
if you just keep on going ...
© Anonymous
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I agree that your writing is quite thought-provoking. My only critique is that maybe you could put more thought into some meter of some kind. I found that that was the only think that I didn't like about it. If you could get your poetry to flow just a little bit more, I think you could grow into a truly excellent writer... I also liked your other work too.
TheArchitect ELITE said...
on Nov. 17 2010 at 1:48 pm
i really like your descriptions of the street, the sleep in your eyes, and the bounty of the land. the more times your read over htis poem the more it makes sense. its beautiful.
horsegirl27 GOLD said...
on Nov. 1 2010 at 3:01 pm
um...kinda confusing but good!
WinterFairy PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 31 2010 at 4:53 pm
Wow really powerful
Phantom_Girl GOLD said...
on Oct. 31 2010 at 6:15 am
Oh, and I forgot to mention that the use of extended metaphor for the dream was excellent. I especially loved the part about sleep still being in the eyes.
Phantom_Girl GOLD said...
on Oct. 31 2010 at 6:14 am
Oh my goodness. What can I say about this poem?
I loved it. The imagry was fabulous, especially the part about the broken glass. The message was solid-Goddess knows the "American Dream" has been perverted and glossed over. The title has just the right amount of biting sarcasm. Even the picture fits well. This is good stuff.
Artistic_whirlwind BRONZE said...
on Oct. 31 2010 at 1:59 am
love the imagry this poem gives! the American dream is such a pathetic streotype that tries to gloss over things people don't want to think about. thank you and please keep writing!
Artistic_whirlwind BRONZE said...
on Oct. 31 2010 at 1:57 am
screename, what a horrible thing to say! just because a poem doesn't make sense to you doesn't mean you can be totally rude. if you can't think of something nice than please don't say it at all :(
azuremoon77 said...
on Oct. 9 2010 at 8:17 pm
It makes a lot of sense. The narrartor has heard that America is considered the land with them most opportunity. But s/he finds out that it's never that easy...
darkangel09 GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2010 at 10:20 pm
i've never heard it put that way before. wow very nice. nothing too good or too bad lasts forever
Kathleen_Lee-Anne BRONZE said...
on Sep. 17 2010 at 4:51 pm
opps, opinion**
Kathleen_Lee-Anne BRONZE said...
on Sep. 17 2010 at 4:49 pm
Wow! you have a brilliant way of putting things. I just joined teenink monday. You should read my story. It's called "Jack" I would love to hear your openion.
darraasheaa GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2010 at 6:42 am
this poem is really well written, and really made me think about society. keep up the good work! :)
samantha9441 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 26 2010 at 7:07 pm
This was really good!! I would love it if you read my piece! I only have one up right now... another one is pending. Thanks!
theatercamper112 SILVER said...
on Aug. 26 2010 at 11:21 am
Really good. I want to read more of your work it would be awesome or even to see artwork. But this was really good! So keep writing.
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