American Dream MAG

By Ivy S., Loganville, WI

so this is where all the dreaming takes me
to a cold, empty reality
with sleep still in my eyes
shivering, confused, I must’ve overslept
now it’s time to wake up
one last yawn, then face the lies
I’m barefoot and the streets are rough
paved with broken glass
but that’s okay
’cause the land is flowing
with milk and honey
bread and butter
and justice
if you just keep on going ...





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on May. 30 2010 at 9:50 am
Patience97 PLATINUM, New Tripoli, Pennsylvania
27 articles 8 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People believe that if we really want to eliminate something, focus on that. How much sense does it make for us to give the particular problem all of the energy, as opposed to focusing on trust, love, living in abundance, education, or peace? -Un.

I like your poem! Keep up the good work :)

 


on May. 30 2010 at 8:14 am
justthtblondie BRONZE, Beach Lake, Pennsylvania
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Best piece i've read all day. Absolutely fantastic!

on May. 14 2010 at 8:23 pm
HeraclitusDRM SILVER, Sewell, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For a man to conquer himself is the first and noblest of all victories." -Plato

nicely done.

on May. 8 2010 at 4:28 pm
EleanorRigby PLATINUM, New York City, New York
28 articles 3 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The optomist proclaims we live in the best of worlds, and the pessimist fears this is true." - James Branch Cabell

So many of the poems on here are incredibly corny, but this managed to be true and genuine. It is a pleasure to read. Great job! And maybe you can read a few of my poems as well. If you do, let me know. 

on May. 8 2010 at 2:16 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

cool stuff, but what pushed you to write this?

on May. 8 2010 at 12:49 pm
ThatOneWritingGirl PLATINUM, Greenwood Village, Colorado
21 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footprints on the moon.
Love Always. :)
When the tides of life turn against you and the current upsets your boat, don't waste time and tears on what might have been, just lie on your back and float.

This is very good and unique. Very creative and deep as well, you're a really good writer! Check out some of my work? Thanks! :)

on May. 8 2010 at 12:07 pm
miss-silverwing GOLD, St. Louis, Missouri
16 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd like to flood the streets of your heart with everything I cannot say.

Accidentally gave you three stars instead of four or five... :( Anyway, I like this poem; it's deliciously dark but somehow hopeful. Great job.

on May. 8 2010 at 10:58 am
perfected_11 SILVER, Cheverly, Maryland
5 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Negative thinking limits gods possibilities for us and for others."
-Craig L

i love it!

the message is right


Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 8 2010 at 7:25 am
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

This is really powerful.

i like the part about waking up, it's worded really well. good work!


on Apr. 16 2010 at 5:44 pm
choreographer218 SILVER, Prairie Village, Kansas
8 articles 3 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
Success is simply a matter of luck. Ask any failure.
-- Earl Wilson

I love this... you are a really amazing writer. The world needs you to write these kinds of poems. So many people can relate to them, including myself!

LivyFay BRONZE said...
on Apr. 16 2010 at 2:34 pm
LivyFay BRONZE, Groton, Massachusetts
4 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind. -DR. Seuss

Amazing, really really really amazing

on Apr. 16 2010 at 11:40 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

I love this. Keep writing.

on Mar. 25 2010 at 6:38 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
22 articles 0 photos 281 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

wow.

very deep, really good:))

beautiful job

on Mar. 25 2010 at 6:35 pm
MeganAnne PLATINUM, Niskayuna, New York
24 articles 0 photos 157 comments

Favorite Quote:
All my life I've looked at words as if I were seeing them for the first time. ~Ernest Hemingway

I really like this poem! I thought that it flowed quite nicely, and don't worry about some of the other comments. Poetry isn't always meant to be understood, only shared, loved, and cherished. Keep it up! great job!

on Mar. 25 2010 at 11:13 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This is a beautiful piece. Please keep writing.

on Mar. 25 2010 at 8:56 am
x0x0Luckyx0x0 SILVER, Enterprise, Utah
6 articles 2 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Killing under the cloak of war is still murder.."-Albert Einstein.

Contrary from the other people that have commented this poem, I completely get it. The true meaning may not be able to be found at first glance, but if you re read it, you can see it. I loved it. :] Good Job.

on Mar. 3 2010 at 11:21 pm
crisscross BRONZE, Phoenix, Arizona
3 articles 2 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is a pleasure in the pathless woods,
There is a rapture on the lonely shore,
There is society, where none intrudes,
By the deep sea, and music in its roar:
I love not man the less, but Nature more."
~lord byron

i think that this poem is great sometimes poems have jsut the true meaning to its author he may see it differently then us trying to figure out its point and the endless opportunities to it is the fun of poetry it never has to ahve a point to me it talks about life has its rough starts but when you get going it becomes easier either that or his dream applies to it all and his dream is him thinking life is full of bread and butter but truly its a wicked place idk really its all the author who truly knows what they wanna say

on Mar. 3 2010 at 9:14 pm
JordanJordanJordan GOLD, Churchville, Virginia
14 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
He is here to keep us safe, not scared.

It is a little inconsistent. I don't really get, I can't get to that deeper point. I am trying to contemplate what is means exactly, can't quite pinpoint it.

on Mar. 3 2010 at 3:48 pm
krisssss PLATINUM, Nyack, New York
22 articles 18 photos 28 comments
The poem is good, but the point is inconsistent. I love this poem alot though, so please keep writing!

cole said...
on Mar. 3 2010 at 2:03 pm
I like this poem aesthetically. But I agree with the tone of the first half much more than the second half. And I think it would benefit from some lines that might convince the reader that the land really does still have milk, honey, and justice. Personally, I don't see it, so the poem doesn't ring true.


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