American Dream

<3 love it!

i loved this!! and it was so nicely written!! :)

I loved it :) made me really reflect! i'm sort of a dark-poem kinda person, and i liked the line "one last yawn, then face the lies." greatt! :)

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The “American Dream” has many tenets, one of which is <a title="Skeptics doubt worth of homeownership as investment" http://personalmoneystore.com/moneyblog/2011/03/21/homeownership-skeptics/">homeownership</a>. A growing number of well qualified experts are starting to openly and notoriously challenge home ownership as an investment, as they assert it doesn't hold up to scrutiny as a severe investment. There's a mounting body of evidence the doubters are right.

Thats exactly how I feel when I've just woken up from a really great dream. It's like you think your in that world but your not and when you finally realize that it's like ugh!! back to reality and my messed up life. plus you really wish you could fall back asleep and go into your dream again but you can't so you just keep on going and try to make the best of everything. that was really well written and great job- :)

I honestly think you could help me with my work I'm kinda new to this poetry thing. But I find  myself liking it more and more each day...

This is really good. It makes me think of the homeless people. Which is sad, but it's touching. I like it! Good job! :)

Wow this is amazing

This is excellent! Truly brilliant! Hey, could you look at some of my work? My newest poem is "It Waits For You." Thanks! Again great job!

This is brilliant. A beautiful description of what that "AMerican Dream" has turned into. As you said its depressing that now all it is, cement, and broken glass.

Wow. That is really good, and true. I love it.

-Lilac

Wow. I just made an account, and this is the most amazing thing I have read so far!

I really liked this! It had the kind of tongue-in-cheek witt that I absolutely love.

I really loved how you presented this. The scheme seems very unique. I would say expand on it and make the transition from negative to positive more natural.

I agree that your writing is quite thought-provoking. My only critique is that maybe you could put more thought into some meter of some kind. I found that that was the only think that I didn't like about it. If you could get your poetry to flow just a little bit more, I think you could grow into a truly excellent writer... I also liked your other work too.

i really like your descriptions of the street, the sleep in your eyes, and the bounty of the land. the more times your read over htis poem the more it makes sense. its beautiful.

um...kinda confusing but good!

Wow really powerful