May 15, 2009
By jofin john BRONZE, Carrollton Tx, Texas
jofin john BRONZE, Carrollton Tx, Texas
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To ashes you came
and to ashes you shall return
The words God uttered to Adam
and Eve
Once you actually see a
loved one dead
so many emotions
run through
your mind
You laugh at the simplest
things just to
avoid crying
You get angered
over small irritations
only to unleash your
loathing of this unjust world
eventually you do
end up crying
and feel

The author's comments:
I wrote this after my uncle died please rate it

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EdytD SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2009 at 1:26 am
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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I think this is great, and very emotional. If you perhaps add some imagery - maybe discuss the salty tang of the tears, your eyes, even the ashes - it would give something for the reader to imagine.

Otherwise, it's a very strong poem. Nice job!

on May. 27 2009 at 2:00 am
Great poem, very conflicting yet relevent emotions about what death is like for a person still here. And it makes Sense!!!! Thats good!!!! I like how you said that you feel sad that hes gone but happy that hes put out of his misery.

I gave you five stars! =]

Sorry about your uncle though =[


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