May 12, 2009
By Rey Divarci BRONZE, Berlin, Other
Rey Divarci BRONZE, Berlin, Other
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This piece of paper makes the world go around,
It changes personalities, characters and lives
It blinds people and forbids them to see reality
It turns friends into enemies
It makes trusted people backstab you
But worst: It turns lovers into foes

Now let’s ask ourselves these questions:
And think carefully and be honest to yourself
Do we really need this to be happy?
Doesn’t happiness come from more important regions?
Regions like friendship love and care?
Would you prefer a house or a home?

I think this ‘’world changing’’ paper’s value is over estimated
I think we should be careful and keep our eyes open
I think there are more important things
What do you think?

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on May. 15 2009 at 10:35 pm
sillyrabbit GOLD, St.louis, Missouri
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Good questions.. :)

Doesn't seem like a poem though.. :(

I like it even though..

Kinda of reminds me of me because I love to ask questions!!

Though it seems a little too preachy (but thats me and we all have are preachy moments so its all good!!)

Also it seems like that subject is talked about too much (maybe its just me! :)) Next time maybe write about something that isn't talked about so much.

Anyway keep writing!!

And love ya!! :)

on May. 15 2009 at 8:32 pm
Electricity PLATINUM, Bradenton, Florida
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I have to agree about money. It does turn lovers into enemies, friends too. Good job! Keep writing! :)

EdytD SILVER said...
on May. 15 2009 at 6:43 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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The idea is a great one, but it's not so much a poem as an editorial. Since you mention the backstabbing, why don't you give a specific, concrete instance that the reader can relate to? explain happiness in sights - a glowing face, etc. Use imagery that the reader can relate to - it will also help them consider the problem.

Wurld BRONZE said...
on May. 15 2009 at 6:02 am
Wurld BRONZE, Tucson, Arizona
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Very good questions that I agree with.

on May. 15 2009 at 1:20 am
KICK3593 PLATINUM, Roslyn Heights, New York
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I think that I've seen this message in oen too many teen poems. We lay the fault of corruption on selfishness, but you provide no solution. This is a question that is asked so much, and you lay no finishing point.

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