Take My Life

April 21, 2009
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Inspired by Jay Asher's 13 Reasons Why

My dear child,
I cradled you when the rest of the world
wasn't home,
and you felt so alone.
I watched you cry,
looking in the mirror,
wiping away your tears,
hiding from your fears.
I was here,
to hold your broken soul
in my hands,
limp and in the dark,
a lifeless ghost.
I have been holding on,
when you needed me the most.
You were wrong,
to swallow all those poisons,
life itself was death to you.
And I knew,
that you needed someone other than I,
to keep you from the want and need to fly,
with all the whitist snow
and painted wings
I gave it all to you,
I gave it everything.
And now our faces pressed agsinst the glass,
your breath is fogging up the window pane,
and I'm crying as I watch you slip away.
My dear child,
I'm gonna miss the way you smiled,
but soon enough forever we will part,
your soul flying above your lifeless heart,
and i will watch you leave the world you knew,
no one cared for us but me and you.





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Anj16 said...
Sept. 25, 2009 at 10:15 pm
it's so sad when you watch yourself slowly slip away. When you lose yourself, your own convictions, and your own reasons. Good poem
 
EdytD said...
Sept. 6, 2009 at 3:46 pm
Great job! This is a very emotional piece, and I think it's fascinating how you write almost, to yourself. (Or, rather, the narrator is speaking to him/herself.) Nice!
 
tor10jax said...
Sept. 5, 2009 at 8:46 pm
I love poem and you picked the perfect title. Good job! Would you mind looking at some of my writing? Thanks!
Keep writing!
 
lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 22, 2009 at 6:47 pm
I think you did an excellent job on bringing the girl into your piece. I loved reading this one and it has a nice flow. Great job!
 
amyxu said...
Jun. 15, 2009 at 7:05 pm
Wow this is amazing. So far, it's my favorite one of yours. It's so meditative and thought-provoking, yet not in an in-your-face kind of way. I like all the imagery used to convey emotion. Good job!!!
 
MySmilesMyMask7 said...
May 30, 2009 at 11:35 pm
good!!!!!!
 
Danibaby3293 said...
May 12, 2009 at 1:58 pm
OMG!!! this is the best poem i have ever read it was so sad but it makes me think of life excperiances your an amazing writer!!
 
camille_1441 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 10, 2009 at 6:23 pm
comments and feedback are appreciated! thanks for reading.
 
Dalya D. said...
May 14, 2009 at 10:28 pm
I really like it, it really tells about feelings. I like the way it leaves a feeling of understanding and sympathy. It also seems like you put some of yourself into it as well; how you feel abut life and how sometimes, you feel alone in the world. I once felt alone, so this poem is meaninful to me.
 
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