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Thoughts Of Him

April 9, 2009
By krazykristen521 GOLD, Scottsville, Kentucky
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Its 1 a.m.
I should go to bed.
but my world is spinning.
with all these thoughts in my head,

He is so strong,
Yet so weak,
I know he needs scream,
He needs to speak,

I try to help,
But he pushes me away,
I will take his pain,
If God would take his away,

He is just like me,
Two years ago,
Lost in grief,
With no where to go,

I want him to laugh,
I need him to smile,
Even though i know,
Coping takes awhile,

I try to help,
But he pushes me away,
Still i linger near the dark,
Pushing the sunlight his way,

Its 1 a.m.
I should go to bed.
But my world is spinning.
With him in my head,

The author's comments:
I see the word differently the most do, before i make a decision, i look at each possible choice. I am calm and confident. I think each day is a gift from god and though in my life i have experienced a lot of pain and grief, i am working to be happy and to make others happy.
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unearthlyhaphazard GOLD said...
on Aug. 21 2009 at 1:30 pm
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

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What a great poem! I agree with EdytD, the rhyming was excellently done. Keep writing!
EdytD SILVER said...
on Apr. 26 2009 at 5:49 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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Neat! I especially like the rhyming - I've never been able to pull that off. Whenever I rhyme, it comes out forced and awkward, but your poem flows.

Good job!



I'd love if you looked at my poetry. Thanks! :D
Inkspired PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 25 2009 at 2:07 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

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Amazing poem!! It flows so well, and everything is just perfect!!
trytobepretty1 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 25 2009 at 3:25 am
trytobepretty1 BRONZE, Sutter Creek, California
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Favorite Quote:
First they came for the communists,
and I didn't speak out because I wasn't a communist.

Then they came for the trade unionists,
and I didn't speak out because I wasn't a trade unionist.

Then they came for the Jews,
and I didn't speak out because I wasn't a Jew.

Then they came for me
and there was no one left to speak out for me.

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this is amazing.

keep writing.

you have some serious talent.