In My Mind (full)

July 17, 2013
By theporcelaingirl BRONZE, Austin, Texas
theporcelaingirl BRONZE, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't point the blame when you can't find nothing, look to yourself and you might find something..." Sleeping With Sirens


Summary:

I am different. And not just the kind of different like freakishly tall. I can do things no other human being can do. I can read minds. I am a mind reader.


Bayleigh P.

In My Mind (full)


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on Jul. 24 2013 at 10:03 pm
theporcelaingirl BRONZE, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't point the blame when you can't find nothing, look to yourself and you might find something..." Sleeping With Sirens

Yeah I tried to do that with the POV's by stating the other's names, but I guess it didn't work haha. I am working on the chapter and I am still trying to figure out what to do next!

on Jul. 24 2013 at 12:00 pm
MorningStar921 PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"They made their own choice. They chose family. And, well... isn't that kinda the whole point? No doubt - endings are hard. But then again... nothing ever really ends, does it?"
--Chuck, 'Supernatural' Episode 522

I like this; great transition from short story to novel. Can't wait to see new chapter. One piece of criticism though: when the POV changes, make it evident. Maybe you could put a heading called "Sailor" when she is telling the story and vice versa when John is telling the story.




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