The Keeper

March 1, 2012
By futurenovelista SILVER, Staatsburg, New York
futurenovelista SILVER, Staatsburg, New York
8 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
"But I being poor have only my dreams...I place my dreams at your feet. Tread softly for you tread on my dreams." -Yeats


Phoebe had always been special. She could feel people’s emotions, had electrifying blue eyes, and could force people into feeling intense emotions like pain, fear, anger, or happiness. In the human world, she had thought of herself a freak. Until her mother takes her into Zelbrem, the temporary dimension of the Zemblers.
Phoebe was a hybrid. Half human, half Zembler. And just when she thought things couldn’t get any weirder, she get’s chosen to be Keeper, the one that will lead the Zemblers to war against their long time enemies the Kranalins. Phoebe goes through tough training and is forced into marrying Ben the Warrior, who hates her because of her status as hybrid, and the fact that she stands out from the rest of them.
Can Phoebe overcome all challenges and do what’s right for her people and herself?


The Keeper

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This book has 8 comments.

on Apr. 22 2012 at 12:34 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
4 articles 0 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,"

Also my book is up now so if u could check it out that's be gr8 I'm gOnna check ousone more of ur work now

on Apr. 22 2012 at 12:32 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
4 articles 0 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,"

I love this story. Very discriptive;) and the plot is very original and the characters agree so deep. Great job. ;)

on Apr. 19 2012 at 2:36 pm
CountryPopGirl PLATINUM, Lawrenceville, New Jersey
38 articles 16 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You love someone, you open yourself up to suffering, that's the sad truth. Maybe they'll break your heart, maybe you'll break their heart and never be able to look at yourself in the same way. Those are the risks. The thought of losing so much control over personal happiness is unbearable. That's the burden. Like wings, they have weight, we feel that weight on our backs, but they are a burden that lifts us. Burdens which allow us to fly..."
-Dr. Jack Hodgins (Bones)

I love this story, although you really left me wanting a sequel.

One question:

Did Phoebe's mom ever tell her dad about what they were?

I just thought that might be an explanation why Phoebe's dad was so abusive.

on Apr. 18 2012 at 7:26 pm
Allicat001 SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is not someone you can live with, love is someone you can't live without."

"Always stand up for what's right even if that means you're standing alone."

So intriguing!  You sucked me in right from the start!  I love it!

on Mar. 18 2012 at 8:09 pm
marchbutterfly GOLD, Orange, New Jersey
18 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you play God, you get screwed."

This story is so interesting. I'e only read the first chapter but so far I think it's really good.

on Mar. 15 2012 at 9:16 am
SummerSkies BRONZE, Antioch, Tennessee
1 article 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If love is the answer, could you please rephrase the question?"- Lily Tomlen

I'm in love with the first chapter. It's always hard to start off right but you knew exactly what to do. Amazing job. :)

on Mar. 12 2012 at 5:36 pm
evnewman BRONZE, Lake Oswego, Oregon
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments
This is amazing! intriguing and suspensful! i like the characters and the writing! its very descriptive and just good writing in general! keep writing

on Mar. 10 2012 at 4:51 pm
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

This is very good! great read! It sounds a lot like a short story I'm working on right now. it intrigued me when I read the summary about phoebe, the one thing I found strange was the use of "Momma" so many times you might have been able to use pronouns for some of those. but overall very good job!

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