You, Me, and Him (working Title)

December 7, 2011
By wannabeauthor96, Sterling Heights, Michigan
wannabeauthor96, Sterling Heights, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Love yourself today cuz baby, you were born this way." -Lady Gaga
"Life's not about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning how to dance in the rain"<3


Summary:

Anna Brown's mom committed suicide, her ex-boyfriend abused her, and she recently stopped cutting herself. She is a mess, and the only person she can depend on is her best friend, Noah. that is, until she meets Jack.
Jack and her date for a while and then she realizes she has feelings for Noah.
Who will she choose? The handsome stranger or her best friend?


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You, Me, and Him (working Title)


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on Mar. 31 2012 at 3:44 am
nemish23 BRONZE, Sydney, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"The happiest people don't necessarily have the best of everything;
They just make the most of everything they have."

"Today is life. The only life we're sure of. Make the most of today." -CSI:NY

i love it! keep going!

also, the setting of the last chapter (8) was a little unclear- it was like where did Jack go?

but apart from that it's awesome. can't wait to read more! :)


on Jan. 19 2012 at 9:51 pm
TheImaginationOfNessie SILVER, Rosemount, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
I am someone
I would never have imagined.
A secret.
A dream . . .
body and soul.
Burn me.
Drown me.
Tell me lies.
I will still be who I am.

-Estrella deMadrigal
Spain 1500

I like the storyline and characters, although it's all a bit cliche. One thing I would critque is that there is very minimal descriptions. Please continue writing, I honestly did enjoy reading your novel!

on Jan. 18 2012 at 9:30 am
Mermaidmissy SILVER, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Ok I so loved your book and it was really awesome to read. I hope you keep on going with the pages. Keep up the good work ok. Oh ya can you check some of my poems and my book please, thank you. :)

on Jan. 14 2012 at 7:10 pm
wannabeauthor96, Sterling Heights, Michigan
0 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love yourself today cuz baby, you were born this way." -Lady Gaga
"Life's not about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning how to dance in the rain"<3

The new chapters are up!! But there is supposed to be chapter between 7 and 8. The conversation in 8 takes place at Anna's house: )

TristinKelly said...
on Dec. 17 2011 at 6:39 pm
TristinKelly, East Grand Rapids, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Rosanne Cash: "The key to change... is to let go of fear

I L-O-V-E THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Dec. 12 2011 at 6:37 pm
Noni3280 BRONZE, Warrnambool, Other
3 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Take each day as it comes.

MORE, MORE, MORE! I love this!

on Dec. 12 2011 at 6:10 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Okay, I have a little criticism.

1.  A little more description would be great.  Your writing style is excellent, but readers want to know more about what is going on!

2.  I think you need to explain a little more about your characters.  You seem to introduce new ones quite quickly, so make sure you describe them and who they mean to Anna when you do.

Other than that, excellent work!  Keep writing!


on Dec. 12 2011 at 12:26 am
Donttrust BRONZE, Fort Collins, Colorado
1 article 2 photos 44 comments
I really liked it you should keep going:)


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