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You, Me, and Him (working Title)

Gabbie N.
You, Me, and Him (working Title)
Summary: Anna Brown's mom committed suicide, her ex-boyfriend abused her, and she recently stopped cutting herself. She is a mess, and the only person she can depend on is her best friend, Noah. that is, until she meets Jack.
Jack and her date for a while and then she realizes she has feelings for Noah.
Who will she choose? The handsome stranger or her best friend?





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nemish23 said...
Mar. 31, 2012 at 3:44 am

i love it! keep going!

also, the setting of the last chapter (8) was a little unclear- it was like where did Jack go?

but apart from that it's awesome. can't wait to read more! :)

 
TheImaginationOfNessie said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 9:51 pm
I like the storyline and characters, although it's all a bit cliche. One thing I would critque is that there is very minimal descriptions. Please continue writing, I honestly did enjoy reading your novel!
 
Mermaidmissy said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 9:30 am
Ok I so loved your book and it was really awesome to read. I hope you keep on going with the pages. Keep up the good work ok. Oh ya can you check some of my poems and my book please, thank you. :)
 
troublemaker2212 said...
Dec. 17, 2011 at 6:39 pm
I L-O-V-E THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
Noni3280 said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 6:37 pm
MORE, MORE, MORE! I love this!
 
wannabeauthor96 replied...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 7:10 pm
The new chapters are up!! But there is supposed to be chapter between 7 and 8. The conversation in 8 takes place at Anna's house: )
 
CarrieAnn13 said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 6:10 pm

Okay, I have a little criticism.

1.  A little more description would be great.  Your writing style is excellent, but readers want to know more about what is going on!

2.  I think you need to explain a little more about your characters.  You seem to introduce new ones quite quickly, so make sure you describe them and who they mean to Anna when you do.

Other than that, excellent work!  Keep writing!

 
Donttrust said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 12:26 am
I really liked it you should keep going:)
 

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