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Till Death do us part

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Kirsty C.
Till Death do us part
Summary: Read through the romatic tale of love and tragady abou king aurthor





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DinoNugget said...
Apr. 26, 2011 at 4:13 pm

I have a few tips for you.  First off, the use of "thou" and a mix of modern phrases (example: "Thou what," her mother said shocked.) makes the text come in through my mind as a little awkward.  I suggest just skip the "thou" and just use "you."  I haven't read many historical fiction stories set in that time period where they used "thou."

Second of all, there were a one or two errors in spelling and such.  "The clothes SEEM to fade out..."  and "... (more »)

 

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