You and I

June 25, 2011
By ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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Summary:

A girl (unnamed) has been friends with her best guy friend for what seems like forever. They've shared everything with one another. But then the times come when it seems that she and her best guy friend end up caring for one another as more than just friends, yet when one feels that way, the other doesn't, or the other doesn't know about the feelings. However, this time the girl is longing for him to really like her. Will it be a fairytale ending?


Anindita C.

You and I


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ani70 said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 8:51 am
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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i tried to use symbols and metaphors in there. 

ani70 said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 8:49 am
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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thank you so much!

ani70 said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 8:49 am
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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thanks! 

LizBiz said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 8:41 am
it's really good!

ani70 said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 8:33 am
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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thanks! 

aud45450 said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 8:29 am
pretty good. nice metaphors. keep writing!

Sly3 said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 9:10 pm
Nice story! Liked theending!  

ani70 said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 8:55 am
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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Thank you! I suppose this story is emotional I'm glad if these emotions were thoroughly expressed with you. Yes I am continuing to write more and more stories.

amandaranda said...
on Jul. 12 2011 at 11:52 am
It's really good! You seem to have poured your emotions into this!!! Please continue writing!

ani70 said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 8:44 pm
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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wow thank you so much! yes, using new kinds of vocabulary that actually make sense is a good thing, so i try to do that. I will definitely be posting more. I'm writing two others stories. one is a second part to You and I and the other is a quite different then this story.
Please keep reading if i post more. Thank you so much for commenting. Very much appreciated!

ELM522 DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 8:42 pm
ELM522 DIAMOND, Selden, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"All those other girls, well they're beautiful, but would they write a song for you?"-"Hey Stephen" by Taylor Swift

It's intriguing!!!  I like your wide variety of vocab.  Most young adult novels seem to be lacking that, so I find it refreshing.  Please post more of it!!!

ani70 said...
on Jul. 2 2011 at 9:20 am
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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I'm in the process of writing two others, I hope you come back and read those as well!

ani70 said...
on Jul. 2 2011 at 9:19 am
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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yay im glad this story appealed to you. yeah and i'm a strong believer that the ending is the most important piece of the book.

thanks so much!


urr8 said...
on Jul. 2 2011 at 7:49 am
I loved this story! Especially the ending. Most normal books you read have a happy ending but this one is so much more awesome and realistic!

ani70 said...
on Jul. 1 2011 at 8:38 pm
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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thanks so much for your comment. im glad you could identify the metaphors. haha :D
i will def take your advice regarding the phone call. looking back at it, i see what you mean. so thank you!

sxzhg07 said...
on Jul. 1 2011 at 8:20 pm

nicee. i found the metaphors especially interesting and well-placed.

one thing though. in the dialogue with the phone conversation. you might want to add some description as to how they're both feeling. i know it's a phone conversation and all, but you could still put something like "i could feel my palms starting to get clammy" haha that was cheesy. but you get the idea. create atmosphere.

and also, make sure it's clear on who says what. i got a bit lost sometimes because there wasn't much clarification on on that in the dialogues.

awesome job!! and keep writing :D


ani70 said...
on Jul. 1 2011 at 12:26 pm
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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thanks so much! yeah i mean...teenage love stories are sappy as they are. but they always end up the way you would want it to end up. this....well..this is my realistic twist on it.

mikeyd said...
on Jul. 1 2011 at 12:19 pm
ths is so gd!!! esp the ending! keep writing!

ani70 said...
on Jun. 30 2011 at 4:18 pm
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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and pleaseee please please vote/rate it!!!

ani70 said...
on Jun. 30 2011 at 4:13 pm
ani70, Lexington, Massachusetts
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pleaseee comment!!! 


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