Faded

May 26, 2011
By skinimini19 SILVER, Sicklerville, New Jersey
skinimini19 SILVER, Sicklerville, New Jersey
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Summary:

The girl, Harmony finally finds her voice,loud enough to finally speak up and then when she thinks thinks can get any better, will they?


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on Jun. 1 2011 at 5:35 pm
skinimini19 SILVER, Sicklerville, New Jersey
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thanks ! i appreciate that. i didnt want to get too personal with this story because it was for my language arts class, i juss wanted to make it good enough for that, but theres so much more i can add to make it better..thanks again though

on May. 30 2011 at 7:18 am
becauseHeloves BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Proverbs 8:12, 14 "I wisdom dwell with prudence, and find out knowledge of witty inventions. Counsel is mine, and sound wisdom: I am understanding; I have strength."

I like the plot but there are a few issues: the story is written in the form of a chapter by chapter synopsis and the balance wavers. Let the reader inside the character so he/she can feel her- i see that Harmony is quite to herself when it comes to her personal life so make her story a more personal while at the same time keeping it distant because that's how Harmony is. Keep writing!!


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