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Faded

miszsweetz93
Faded
Summary: The girl, Harmony finally finds her voice,loud enough to finally speak up and then when she thinks thinks can get any better, will they?



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becauseHeloves said...
May 30, 2011 at 7:18 am
I like the plot but there are a few issues: the story is written in the form of a chapter by chapter synopsis and the balance wavers. Let the reader inside the character so he/she can feel her- i see that Harmony is quite to herself when it comes to her personal life so make her story a more personal while at the same time keeping it distant because that's how Harmony is. Keep writing!!
 
miszsweetz93 replied...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 5:35 pm
thanks ! i appreciate that. i didnt want to get too personal with this story because it was for my language arts class, i juss wanted to make it good enough for that, but theres so much more i can add to make it better..thanks again though
 

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