Teen Ink

I've only read the first chapter so far, but it's terrific. I only needed to read the first paragraph to be hooked. I liked the references to your other story "A Letter to my Sister's Future Boyfriend". Or was it the other way around? I can't tell which you wrote first.

I just have one criticism for this Chapter. I found it unrealistic that the police would come just because Juliet claimed there was a boy following her around. They wouldn't take a call like that very seriously, and I d... (more »)

Haha, great spin on the great Shake - good job!

That was soooo funny, Cat was my fav character

Wow. I loved your story! It's amazingly funny :)

I love the irony in here! I hated reading Romeo and Juliet last year, so imagine how much I enjoyed this parody. I was so caught up in the story that I forgot to notice the mechanics of the writing itself. I liked the narration shift but I thought the conclusion ended a tad to sloppily.

Very true! I think Romeo and Juliet is a perfect example of ranging teenage hormones!!

i really like this im adding it to my favs

great spin off!! whats your fav shakespeare?! please comment on my story it would mean a lot. graci!

Wait, how does Romeo end up living in medeival England if this story took place in modern-day? Anyway, I loved the Shakespeare part thats hilarious i love how you described Shakespeare writing the story. also, romeo as a stalker?! NICE!

Very easy and fun to read. Have you ever seen the play "Good night Desdemona, good night Juliet"? Well, anyways, it has some vibe such as that. 

Very cute! I love how you included Shakespeare in the story. I really like how you have Juliet respond to Romeo:) and it's really well written! I couldn't find one grammatical error. Great job!! (if you're bored, I'd love some feedback on my novel "Stuck in the Past":)

You weren't kidding when you put humor as one of the tags for this book!

I really liked this book! It was well-written and hilarious!

I wrote two stories; they're in the thriller/mystery section. I'd really like you to read them and give me some feedback.

Keep up the good writing!

Very well written.

And incredibly funny. That's all I pretty much have to say--this left me laughing so hard and wanting to read more! I'm impressed at your ability to write humour--I can't pull it off myself and I don't know a lot of people who can.

I don't see any major problems with the dialogue--I did find it a little bit sloppy at some points, but nothing that honestly ruined the story or made the characters seem unrealistic.

A few things though--actually, only two:<... (more »)

I thought this was really good. I think it would be extremely hard to write a parody, to put a fresh twist on something so well known, but you did a great job. 5 Stars =)

I love the idea that Shakespear traveled into our time for inspiration; the "original" Romeo and Juliet is a lot more hilarious than the "real" version! Nice job! I laughed so much, I almost fell out of my chair! :D

This is such a great parody of Romeo and Juliet!!! it is HILARIOUS!!! I really like how Shakespeare went forward in time to get ideas for a play, and then went back in time to put his ideas into action. Brilliant! Your dialogue seems a little sloppy at times. It's like you're undecided whether to go full out with shakespeare language, or do modern day language. But it is a comedic story, so it works okay. But really, this was really funny, and really imaginative. Great job!

Oh my golly HILARIOUS, COMICAL, WITTY, HUMOROUS, ANY other word you can think of that means FUNNIER THAN HECK. I laughed until I cried. And you drive home a good point (I have read the original Romeo and jUliet) - sometimes this whole "Star-Cross'd Lovers thing is hard to buy. I LOVE the characters, especially Juliet and Shakespeare. Romeo is a LITTLE BIT CREEPY.

I am beside myself with laughter. This is the best parody of anything I've ever read. THe modern twist you put on it is great. It's hilarious and more relatable than plain old Romeo and Juliet. I liked how you changed perspectives as the chapters went on as well. Your grammar isn't shabby and your spelling is fantastic. I was drawn into the story and it didn't disappoint. One thought : I wish you would have spent more time on Romeo's perspective. I expected a different reaction when he met Shake... (more »)

Interesting is the only word I have to describe it. Great job :D

Clever! Did NOT see that coming! :) Love the twist! :)