The Great Escape

January 25, 2011
By Ben.smith BRONZE, Shoreline, Washington
Ben.smith BRONZE, Shoreline, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Whatever"


Summary:

My family is all dead accept for my brother who saves me in the beginning. But I find an old friend and when we go through together things happen. People die.


Ben.smith

The Great Escape


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on Jan. 29 2011 at 11:33 am
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"A guy walks up to me and asks 'What's Punk?'. So I kick over a garbage can and say 'That's punk!'. So he kicks over a garbage can and says 'That's Punk'?, and I say 'No that's trendy'!"- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

You have a few grammar issues you need to fix (the difference between except and accept, between you're and your, etc.)

Also, there is a line in the summary I don't get. "...when we go through together things happen." I don't understand what that is supposed to mean.

 

I think as long as you have someone look over your work and edit the little errors like that you will have a fine time writing!

 

Please check out my novel SuperNOVA in the novels section and leave your thoughts on it. Thanks :D





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