Of Death and Laughter

January 21, 2011
By Lacer GOLD, Highland Village, Texas
Lacer GOLD, Highland Village, Texas
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The thing about philosophy is that it often runs dry when thought of so shallowly.


It was over at the pinnacle of his delight. At the heighth of his merry way down the road. The end was there and the end was passed. The game played. The curtain down. He was no more satisfied by the wanderings of the creature before him, nor was he remorseful of his deed. The past was behind him and the voice was silent. The night had cocooned his mind with the foggy disownedge that is madness. His hand twitched, and he put it to his side.
The knife in his other hand stopped its carving. He gazed at the body, wide eyed and no longer screaming. It was dead. His toy was broken.
He had best go out and find another.


The author's comments:
With this creepy imagery, I give you the shortest of my short stories.

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OwenDark said...
on May. 18 2012 at 9:15 am
OwenDark, Ellicott City, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"Too late."

woah dude, the whole 'His toy was broken' thing was really creepy. Your stories are really disconcerting but that makes you an awesome horror writer

KateLA GOLD said...
on May. 17 2012 at 11:14 pm
KateLA GOLD, Everett, Washington
11 articles 20 photos 194 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don’t you find it Funny that after Monday(M) and Tuesday(T), the rest of the week says WTF?
-Unknown

I'm sorry it just doesn't capture me in any sort of way, but I'll give you good criticism like I said I would. It doesn't mention he is in any way moving until the 8th sentence which takes the reader off guard in a clumsy sort of way. In the thirteen sentences it has, it just needs more explanation and detail. For example by ellaborating; instead of 'wide-eyed and no longer screaming' you could have said: He gazed at the body, staring glassy-eyed (and muted by death) or (and silenced by the resolution of death.)

on Jan. 25 2011 at 12:55 pm
MidnightWriter SILVER, Ontario, Other
6 articles 0 photos 225 comments

Favorite Quote:
Writers are a less dangerous version of the career criminal. Everywhere they go, they see the potential for the perfect crime. The difference is that writers have better self control.

I like it, but I thought I'd point out that, At the heighth of his merry way down the road, is not a complete sentence.

on Jan. 24 2011 at 3:06 pm
DaughteroftheTrumpet BRONZE, East Aurora, New York
2 articles 2 photos 214 comments

Favorite Quote:
Washington Irving once said “There is sacredness in tears. They are not the mark of weakness, but of power. They are messengers of overwhelming grief and of unspeakable love.”

sounds like a creepy serial murderer to me!


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