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Young Brown dashed to the crime scene as soon as he was called. He got to Café 5, the crime scene, and found the police gathered around the victim. Together with them was the famous Vancouver detective, Walter M. Morris, renowned not only for his crime solving capability but also for his great skill at investigating the private life of specific people. Morris was never found without his old, wooden smoking pipe.
Detective Anthony Brown found that the cold pale body on the floor was property of Thomas Raw, Café 5’s owner. Anthony crouched down to take a closer look at the body. All of a sudden, an ox strong grip took hold of Brown’s shoulder. The young man jumped up and found Morris an inch away of his eyes. He shook off a deep shiver rising up his spine. They greeted each other and went over to a corner to discuss the case.
The theory was as followed: one Tuesday night, Mr. Raw stayed up late working at his shop, cleaning the floor. Someone had surprised him from behind with the gift of a broken neck. His wife got worried and headed off to her love’s store where she found him sleeping on the ground, never to get up again.
Brown decided to go step by step. First, he would inspect the shop and interrogate his main suspect, Mrs. Raw. He got a sizzled cup of coffee and begun his tasks. He examined his crime scene, and was left open mouthed. Not even a clue of the murderer’s entrance. Perhaps, he would have more luck with Mrs. Raw.

As the detective got to the house he noticed a blood stain on the door handle. He got out a slick and shinny gun and hid it close, just in case. He rang the bell a few seconds. After a moment, a lady came out.
Her hair was short and made her look like a cherry with emerald eyes and ruby threads. She was dressed up like if she was going somewhere. The questions had begun as soon as possible.
Q: Did you love your husband?
A: Yes. The true question is … did he love me?
Q: What does that mean?
A: We had a small quarrel a few days ago at dinner, around two I think. He cut my hand with a sharp knife. Its blade did not cut deep into me. Then, I ran out to a hotel. I think he sent to look for me. A man started out for me. There, I lost a copy of Café 5 keys. Luckily, I have another.
Brown realized she was not the one. Mrs. Raw gave him a bill she had found. It was dirty. A dusty black smudge crawled over it. Brown put it safely into an evidence bag.

Brown’s eyes were back on the body. He looked at the injury and found the same black dusty smudge. Now, a smile was on every corner of his mouth. You could see his teeth plucked out. His eyes lit up like a match. He was then invited by Walter to a drink at a bar.
After some drinks, Walter headed off to the men’s toilet and left Anthony his crooked pipe. Anthony held it for him with pleasure. When Morris was back, Brown handed him his pipe. As he took his hand away he noticed a black dusty stain. Anthony’s eyes glowed. Morris made a frown when he understood what happened. Brown rushed out the bar and dashed into Café 5.
Anthony slightly opened the shop door and got near the body. He glared at the black dust on the neck of Mr. Raw. “Morris,” Brown whispered. He had been with the murderer all along! His new theory was that Raw had hired Morris to spy on his wife. He looked for her and got a copy of the shop keys. When the detective was not paid, he got into the shop and killed Raw!
All of the sudden a black shape came out of the dark with thunderous footsteps.
“You were looking for me?”



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RedBlue said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 7:47 am:
This story is worth a thousand words!
 
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Billyboy said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 7:44 am:
You should write like a series of books with Brown as the detective.
 
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Frsan said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 7:41 am:
First thing I've read on here, and it made me want to stick around :D
 
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Alicia said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 7:38 am:
Yes, please! I am waiting for the next chapter too.
 
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Just_you said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 7:02 am:
Very witty, please do a sequel!
 
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HLee said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 6:52 am:
Spicy, great thriller.
 
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YHHZ said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 6:47 am:
Keep it up!
 
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cloe said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 6:10 am:
Wonderful!
 
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Ann L. Library said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 8:48 pm:
Congratulations Maky! Just like Brown,  you are always looking for words and phrases to express yourself in writing! Keep up the good work and share it with us!!!
 
Makena B. replied...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 11:17 pm :
Thank you very much. I sincerely appreciate your words. Maky
 
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Robin said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 8:21 pm:
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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Palke said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 7:51 pm:
The new Agatha Christie.
 
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Sary said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 7:49 pm:
Excellent thriller.
 
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jonny k said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 5:09 pm:
*****
 
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Tzippy said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 4:13 pm:
Fabulous, great to read next to the fire in a stomy night.
 
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Yules said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 1:37 pm:
Yes, I also want to know about this balck shape, is it Morris?
 
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NHJC said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 1:32 pm:
Who is this black shape at the end? What happens next? More mystery yet to come?
 
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Clari said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 12:52 pm:
very  creative
 
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Marin said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 11:34 am:
Great descriptions, great suspense, could imagine every single move and step.
 
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Brian said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 11:00 am:
Already waiting for the next piece.
 
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