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Young Brown dashed to the crime scene as soon as he was called. He got to Café 5, the crime scene, and found the police gathered around the victim. Together with them was the famous Vancouver detective, Walter M. Morris, renowned not only for his crime solving capability but also for his great skill at investigating the private life of specific people. Morris was never found without his old, wooden smoking pipe.
Detective Anthony Brown found that the cold pale body on the floor was property of Thomas Raw, Café 5’s owner. Anthony crouched down to take a closer look at the body. All of a sudden, an ox strong grip took hold of Brown’s shoulder. The young man jumped up and found Morris an inch away of his eyes. He shook off a deep shiver rising up his spine. They greeted each other and went over to a corner to discuss the case.
The theory was as followed: one Tuesday night, Mr. Raw stayed up late working at his shop, cleaning the floor. Someone had surprised him from behind with the gift of a broken neck. His wife got worried and headed off to her love’s store where she found him sleeping on the ground, never to get up again.
Brown decided to go step by step. First, he would inspect the shop and interrogate his main suspect, Mrs. Raw. He got a sizzled cup of coffee and begun his tasks. He examined his crime scene, and was left open mouthed. Not even a clue of the murderer’s entrance. Perhaps, he would have more luck with Mrs. Raw.

As the detective got to the house he noticed a blood stain on the door handle. He got out a slick and shinny gun and hid it close, just in case. He rang the bell a few seconds. After a moment, a lady came out.
Her hair was short and made her look like a cherry with emerald eyes and ruby threads. She was dressed up like if she was going somewhere. The questions had begun as soon as possible.
Q: Did you love your husband?
A: Yes. The true question is … did he love me?
Q: What does that mean?
A: We had a small quarrel a few days ago at dinner, around two I think. He cut my hand with a sharp knife. Its blade did not cut deep into me. Then, I ran out to a hotel. I think he sent to look for me. A man started out for me. There, I lost a copy of Café 5 keys. Luckily, I have another.
Brown realized she was not the one. Mrs. Raw gave him a bill she had found. It was dirty. A dusty black smudge crawled over it. Brown put it safely into an evidence bag.

Brown’s eyes were back on the body. He looked at the injury and found the same black dusty smudge. Now, a smile was on every corner of his mouth. You could see his teeth plucked out. His eyes lit up like a match. He was then invited by Walter to a drink at a bar.
After some drinks, Walter headed off to the men’s toilet and left Anthony his crooked pipe. Anthony held it for him with pleasure. When Morris was back, Brown handed him his pipe. As he took his hand away he noticed a black dusty stain. Anthony’s eyes glowed. Morris made a frown when he understood what happened. Brown rushed out the bar and dashed into Café 5.
Anthony slightly opened the shop door and got near the body. He glared at the black dust on the neck of Mr. Raw. “Morris,” Brown whispered. He had been with the murderer all along! His new theory was that Raw had hired Morris to spy on his wife. He looked for her and got a copy of the shop keys. When the detective was not paid, he got into the shop and killed Raw!
All of the sudden a black shape came out of the dark with thunderous footsteps.
“You were looking for me?”



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bb nj said...
Aug. 2, 2010 at 4:19 am:
Favulous!!!!
 
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Sally Sunshine said...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 1:51 pm:
Maky, you are writing better and better!  Congrats!  I´m very proud of you!  Patsy
 
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katy kleen said...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 9:01 am:
excellent!!!
 
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SharpieChance said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 4:27 pm:
I am confused. Sorry, I didnt get it.
 
MakenaB_mjbc99 replied...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 1:11 pm :
Thomas Raw hired a private investigator (Walter M. Morris) to follow his wife (Mrs. Raw). When he did not pay, the investigator killed Raw. Luckily, the clever detective Anthony Brown solves the case, mainly with the clue of the black smudge (tobacco from Morris' pipe). Thanks for reading the story! Hope you liked it! Makena.
 
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Hana Esther said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 10:32 am:
Loved this story and fully agree with Julito regarding your videos, amazing work. "Thanks to Science" is simple but powerful, "Bricks of Knowledge" absolutely conveys the message, "Greek Legacy" is fun and educational and "Play Back" has an elegant, clean and fresh sense of humor, it is really fun.
 
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Mili said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 10:27 am:
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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Paco said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 10:26 am:
In that case I can be Morris, I just have the perfect pipe and a hat to match. Great story!
 
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Joaco said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 10:24 am:
If it goes on stage, I'd love to be Detective Brown.
 
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Julito said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 10:12 am:

Love this thriller!

Congrats on your videos, amazing work. "Thanks to Science" is simple but powerful, "Bricks of Knowledge" absolutely conveys the message, "Greek Legacy" is fun and educational and "Play Back" has an elegant, clean and fresh sense of humor, it is really fun. Well Done!

 
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Simon said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 9:59 am:
Perfect suspense.
 
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Guille said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 9:53 am:
Was it for love or money or both?
 
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Quique said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 9:52 am:
The pipe...ah, that was great kid.
 
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Bertie said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 9:50 am:
Very entertaining. Loved your videos.
 
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jj lee said...
Jul. 30, 2010 at 10:08 pm:
<(:=:)>
 
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jj lee said...
Jul. 30, 2010 at 10:06 pm:
#\-/@\-/#
 
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aye mendez said...
Jul. 30, 2010 at 4:15 pm:
Buenisimo!!!
 
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Sebastian said...
Jul. 30, 2010 at 10:19 am:
Descriptive, strong short sentences that convey suspense. Well done.
 
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jd jason said...
Jul. 29, 2010 at 8:38 pm:
Very very good my dear!
 
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kloe ferguson said...
Jul. 29, 2010 at 8:37 pm:
Your story is very good!
 
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