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The City of Centsia sat beside a range of mountains called the Barr, named for their tendency to barricade attacking armies. The city itself consisted of tall buildings, the kind of buildings where you could see the first few floors from the ground and the last from the stars. The material was glass: a greenish kind of glass that made each building twinkle beautifully in the moonlight.

There were two kinds of people in the City of Centsia: the winged and the walkers. The winged were the sacred people, worshipped by all, and the walkers suffered a superfluous amount of disadvantages in their wake. There were blood sacrifices every night, sacrifices made to the winged. Every winged needed a sacrifice, every night. Of course, the ones to be sacrificed were the accused, the people who had disrupted this perfect society with their crimes.

Emerald Hayden was a half-winged. She carried an angelic, beautiful appearance. Her green eyes were large and open to the world, welcoming conversation. Her hair was a warm brown color, the color of melted chocolate in the pot of a good chef. Her lips formed a perfect dainty smile, ever-pleasant and friendly.

Unfortunately, no wings braced Emerald’s back. She was forced to saunter through the same streets as the disgusting walkers, born to die. Most walkers carried disease and almost all of them were accused. They reeked of poison and unhappiness, and they had no aspirations for their futures.
That’s what Emerald had thought.

Dusk was her only winged friend. His eyes were a cool blue and his hair a creamy white. His skin was pasty and eatable. His wings, however, were by far his most striking feature. The feathers formed intricate patterns, almost like pictures, when he spread them out. They were beautiful, and they were the only things that set Dusk and her apart.

At night the two would sit atop the golden building, the only plated building in the entire city. He would take her by the hand and leap from the place unexpectedly, sending her heart racing. As they spread apart, only clasping fingers, it almost felt as if she had wings too. She wasn’t a walker up here. She was a winged.

In the daytime, though, Dusk was separated from her. He would go to his school, somewhere in the sky, and she would go to hers. There were no other half-winged in her school, which she felt was completely unfair. She had no friends here. She would simply sulk in the shadows of her classrooms, opening ancient text and praising the winged.

It was early December when her destiny changed paths. She was hungry, hungrier than she ever had been before. Dusk delivered food to her here and there, but it was against the order, and he was always afraid to be punished. Emerald would scream at him silently for being so foolish. The winged were never punished or accused, no matter what they did. Everyone knew that.

There was a food stall in the center of Emerald’s town. It taunted the villagers: it was covered in salted fish and meat. Delicious oysters and greenery presented themselves to the world. But no one could afford the stall-owner’s prices. No one would dare steal from the stall, though. Everyone who had attempted to was never seen again; accused and sacrificed.

It was late; almost her meeting time with Dusk, and Emerald was determined to take her share. She walked casually past the stall several times before producing a plan: she was to walk past as if heading for the library across the street, and take one of those delicious looking pieces of meat as she went. There it was, a flawless plan, and it would certainly put some good food into Emerald’s stomach.

She breathed deeply several times before beginning her walk across the block. The journey was slow and harrowing: each step felt like miles and miles. Suddenly, the stall was right beside her, and she snatched a piece of that thick red meat.
Her loose shirt became snagged.

Frantically, Emerald tugged at the fabric of her shirt, to no avail. It was obvious what she had been doing. Her fingers were tainted red with blood. She was doomed while she stood there, and eventually surrounded. The winged guards were the scariest winged Emerald had ever seen. Their wings were scarlet red, their faces dark and unforgiving. They never showed mercy, not to anyone.
Something burned her back: the mark of the accused.

“Bring her for blood sacrifice.” One of them declared before turning to her smugly. “Aren’t you happy, Emerald? You made it just in time.”

“Please, don’t do this.” She muttered, scared stiff.

“Oh, you know we always consider the requests of the accused.”

They never did, and Emerald knew it.

Slowly, she was dragged through the twisting roads and finally to the altar, the altar that told stories of death and destruction. It was the altar that people saw before they died, and everyone paid their final respects to the altar.

One of the winged stood before her, behind the majestic altar. “Emerald, you are hereby sentenced to death for your crime as an accused. Actions are decided based on the need to maintain a civil, perfect society. Would you like to meet the one who you will be sacrificed to?”

“Yes, I would.” She said. Why not? It would be the last person she would see, anyways.

Emerald lowered her head to the footsteps of her winged, and when she looked up she was staring into cool, elegant, beautiful blue eyes.




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Katie.ZThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 6, 2012 at 7:11 pm:
that was soo cool
 
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kkizzee05 said...
Mar. 4, 2012 at 1:09 pm:
I really love this... It's great!
 
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FantasyLuva said...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 10:43 pm:
I simply love your story, from the friendship-romance that seemed to bloom with Dusk and Emerald, despite the limited description, to the emotion that I got from all the setting. I can see myself as being one of the norm people
 
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JessieB said...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 5:44 pm:
Really good! I can't usually get into fantasy but this was really good! It'd be cool if you developed Dusk's character some more, but it was still good. I really liked it!
 
Writer_Jordan replied...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 10:40 pm :
Now that you mention it, I really wish I had described Dusk in more detail... Thanks for the comment!!
 
TaurusGal This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 24, 2012 at 1:38 am :
I like Dusk, lol~~~
 
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aurum_angel said...
Feb. 28, 2012 at 7:17 pm:
Great piece! Sort of dystopian and fantasy-ish, and is was really dramatic. Nice job!
 
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Maggie2014 said...
Feb. 25, 2012 at 10:42 pm:

Wow this is great. Immeadiatley hooked me and afterward i didnt want to stop reading

your desriptions are beautiful and realistic

the only thing i would say is that the tone of the piece is very mature however their were a couple instances when you used words that were maybe a little off (scary, completley unfair etc...)

your description of emerald was beautiful

 

 
Writer_Jordan replied...
Feb. 25, 2012 at 10:48 pm :
Thank you! and yes I think you're right about those phrases. I guess I was trying to get Emerald's personality through a little more
 
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Erin123 said...
Feb. 24, 2012 at 10:22 pm:
I love the plot, opening. I grew interested, pulled into the world that you described. I smacked myself in the face when her shirt got snagged. I didn't see that coming!!
 
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DarlSims said...
Feb. 24, 2012 at 6:44 pm:
Amazing descriptions of characters and setting. I love the whole concept. I have a question, though. What about her dad/mom? You said she was a half-winged.
 
Writer_Jordan replied...
Feb. 27, 2012 at 9:37 pm :
You'd probably assume from it that her dad would be out of there after she was born. The only people fully accepted in the society are the winged! If the story continued, it would be likely that the only one who could change the system would be a winged such as Dusk.
 
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peypeyj said...
Feb. 24, 2012 at 4:00 pm:
great original concept! i was immediatly hooked by the strange names of things! I LOVE THIS! 
 
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LilRed235 said...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 7:12 pm:
Oh wow! This is really great! I could totally see a book being made out of this. Excellent surprising ending... fantastic. :)
 
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Everlasting said...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 9:30 am:
WOW ! the descriptions present greattttt images that come to mind when reading this. really nice job (: the story was unique and nice too . :)
 
Everlasting replied...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 9:31 am :
*ps* the title is good too, i cnt ever seem to come up with good titles , lol but yea really good job
 
Writer_Jordan replied...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 7:02 pm :
Yeah to come up with titles I take little things that are important in the stories but may not be directly stated in the text. Thank you for your feedback (:!
 
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DreamInTheRainThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 22, 2012 at 6:49 pm:
This is amazing. Straight up amazing. I love how you weave a story with your amazing words. TRULY SPECTACULAR!!
 
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Blue4indigo said...
Feb. 21, 2012 at 2:30 pm:
I really liked this; the plot is wonderful, and it would make a great book! The descriptions are amazing as well
 
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TitleKubo said...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 6:04 pm:
Wow, i think you should try and describe emerald a bit more, i myself think that this could become a full-fledged story if you want to continue with this! plz comment on my article TeenInk.com/fiction/thriller_mystery/article/434487/Switch-of-Dreamy-Horror/
 
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