Changed 2/2

July 17, 2010
By Erudite GOLD, Rawalpindi, Other
Erudite GOLD, Rawalpindi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
trust your heart
if the seas catch fire
(and live by love
though the stars walk backward)


I opened my eyes and gasped. I looked around and saw that I was lying in bed, shivering. I saw the window partially open, letting in cool air. I stumbled towards it and closed it. I leaned against the window and closed my eyes, taking in slow breaths. After a few seconds passed, I finally opened my eyes and turned round, and pressed my back to the wall. My legs started to tremble and soon gave in to exhaustion and I slid to the ground. Then I pressed my head to my knees and stared at my thighs which seemed as dark as night. I felt a presence and looked up in a deliberately slow movement. Eshell was there leaning against the wall and her feet were crossed. She looked smug and when I did not say anything she started to grin.
“So it wasn’t a dream?” I asked my voice husky.
“It was not a dream, Good-looking.” She said in anticipation.
I heard the squeaky turn of the knob that belonged to my door. I stared at the knob as it turned and then Eshell disappeared, without me noticing. After what seemed like a century later, the door opened and someone feminine stood in the doorway.
“You okay, honey?” she asked softly.
I ran to her with inhumanly speed and I grabbed her shoulders and lunged for her neck. A few minutes later I realized what I had done. I looked around and saw that I had blood all over my shirt and pants; I licked my lips and tasted blood, sending me into a near frenzy. I saw her face, pale and un-alive. I reached for her face but dropped it as I saw the blood on my hands. I had killed her, I had killed my wife…


The author's comments:
My second piece of "changed"..
should i write more, i mean i only intended it to be a 2 part story, but now i am not so sure...what do ya'll think?

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on Aug. 12 2010 at 4:09 pm
alaskatrailmutt, Jefferson, Maryland
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Hah hah mayyyybe. Just a idea since hahaha the confused both author and reader XD lol. It was good though. Thanks for the clarifacation. :D

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Erudite GOLD said...
on Aug. 12 2010 at 1:36 pm
Erudite GOLD, Rawalpindi, Other
19 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
trust your heart
if the seas catch fire
(and live by love
though the stars walk backward)

um, see in chap 1 they (the guy and eshell) were at a party and somehow the guy knew she was a vamp and she turned him into one too cuz he said he wanted to. and he asked for that because he..well i dont know myself, i havent decided..i just let my fingers flow over the keyboard and it wrote this! =P well, when he said "so it wasnt a dream" he was asking that what had happened early was true or not...okay..this is so confusing i bet.. :\ i should give more thoughts and details to my stories..your right.. :\ 

on Aug. 12 2010 at 10:58 am
alaskatrailmutt, Jefferson, Maryland
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Most of the beggining I had NO IDE what was going on lol. And the dream part "it wasn't a dream"What wasn't a dream huh? Getting married?

Erudite GOLD said...
on Aug. 12 2010 at 9:31 am
Erudite GOLD, Rawalpindi, Other
19 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
trust your heart
if the seas catch fire
(and live by love
though the stars walk backward)

haha...so, what confused u, i'd love to explain!!

on Aug. 11 2010 at 3:29 pm
alaskatrailmutt, Jefferson, Maryland
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Oh no! BAD edward! XD Ahhhh ah hah. Loved it lol. I liked it. Would be cool if you added some more details for a sec or two I was lost. lol.


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