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Siren's Call

September 19, 2009
By Anj16 GOLD, Eagan, Minnesota
Anj16 GOLD, Eagan, Minnesota
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At the siren’s call came an immediate halt of universal noise, followed by the sinuous movement of earth wave; it shook, dusted off the empty shack, and finally, finally woke up the lazy man in the hammock.

It was a long call, the siren’s one, as it produced such a sweet, inviting sound that seemed ethereal and divine; it was almost a rule that nobody resist it. But how can one do so? That was a question to ask, as the voice, taunting now, lead the dazed man moving. The man didn’t know divine, for he was a sinner, a lonely deliverer of human error, but still he succumbed to the banal holiness of the voice, fell for it, until he was lured and mindless . . . charmed and claimed. Such was the intent of the voice.

And so he went to the origin of the sound, felt the incredible lightness as he put foot in front of foot. He didn’t feel the earth, though, only the air as he took slow drunken steps. So easy, so light, as if flying, the man had thought, and went on gaiting.

In his mind was the owner of the voice, a beautiful maiden whose snow-white hair fell willowy upon the small frame of her shoulders, then and again tousled by the adoring wind. It was a gentle picture that the man had conjured in his thoughts; it was tender and mysterious. It was once what he had lost, and now he swore to claim it and never let go again.

And so he walked and walked . . . walked and walked until he felt the pain move up from his feet and to his legs. The man didn’t mind one bit? his quest was worth more.

When he reached the place the voice hid in silence, produced a distressful atmosphere all around. Then there was the cast of moonbeams. They clashed onto the ground, merged as one brilliant white, and filmed the place with fairy-like glitters. His nervous heart fluttered at the sight of fantasy.

But bathed by the moonlight was a slender figure of a woman, a tiny shadow yards and yards away. Even from afar he was seduced. And so the man, being a creature weak from temptation, walked toward the mysterious woman.

It was when he was near that he regretted doing so.

Under the brilliant light of the moon was a woman showered with death stench, beneath her rested pools of blood, crept over the ground and scattered more. Their eyes met, held, then locked, and he saw sanguinity there, a kind of crazed desire and greed that turned his blood into ice.

The woman seemed to know of his thoughts as she smiled . . . smiled with the passion of death. And when the man started to run, she lunged furiously, outstripping the abrupt gust of wind.

It was midnight now as the owl screeched, as nightly predators went to hunt . . . and as the last bloodcurdling scream in the forest ended the man.


The author's comments:
Okay so this is one of my short stories. Basically this is all about a traditional siren and I hope you like it.

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Desanyx SILVER said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 9:16 pm
Desanyx SILVER, Westfield, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
The imagination is man's power over nature. -Wallace Stevens

Yes, however you are forgetting an important detail of Sirens being of the water. Also, I find it highly ridiculous that you need to badly rank my articles just to make yourself feel better. Please desist from doing so since it does nothing but make yourself look bad.

Jenna09 said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 6:07 pm
my bad. i think he lacks orginality. erase the "too" part cause urs definitely rocks

Jenna09 said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 6:06 pm
i think your story is awesome. dont mind this guy. i saw his article and it lacks originality. i think ive seen tons of stories with that kind of plot. and u gotta see his poems about love. too cliche. i think ur siren hits the traditional siren. i researched it and it matches. and even if it doesn't, a writer has to write what he wants. because if you limit yourself (like what that guy up there wants) then nothings gonna turn out good. and by the way, your writing is exceptional!

Jenna09 said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 6:05 pm
i think your story is awesome. dont mind this guy. i saw his article and it lacks originality too. i think ive seen tons of stories with that kind of plot. and u gotta see his poems about love. too cliche. i think ur siren hits the traditional siren. i researched it and it matches. and even if it doesn't, a writer has to write what he wants. because if you limit yourself (like what that guy up there wants) then nothings gonna turn out good. and by the way, your writing is exceptional!

Anj16 GOLD said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 5:44 pm
Anj16 GOLD, Eagan, Minnesota
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments
and here i found this in wikipedia: In Greek mythology, the Sirens . . . . portrayed as seductresses . . . According to Ovid (Metamorphoses V, 551), the Sirens were the companions of young Persephone and were given wings by Demeter[6] to search for Persephone when she was abducted. Their song is continually calling on Persephone. The term "siren song" refers to an appeal that is hard to resist but that, if heeded, will lead to a bad result.

enjoy

Anj16 GOLD said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 5:42 pm
Anj16 GOLD, Eagan, Minnesota
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments
if thats ur opinion, then so be it.

Desanyx SILVER said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 5:19 pm
Desanyx SILVER, Westfield, New Jersey
5 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
The imagination is man's power over nature. -Wallace Stevens

Originality IS what writers aim for, there is no need to rename your creature. The creature you describe sounds much more like a succubus in my opinion.

Anj16 GOLD said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 12:00 pm
Anj16 GOLD, Eagan, Minnesota
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments
and by the way, this is an article from wikipedia: According to Ovid (Metamorphoses V, 551), the Sirens were the companions of young Persephone and were given wings by Demeter[6] to search for Persephone when she was abducted. Their song is continually calling on Persephone. The term "siren song" refers to an appeal that is hard to resist but that, if heeded, will lead to a bad result.

go figure

Anj16 GOLD said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 11:58 am
Anj16 GOLD, Eagan, Minnesota
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments
i think originality is what writers should aim for. i could have done my research, reinforce the generally accepted idea, and in the end, produce a second-rate, copycat article. and one more thing, you don't speak for all the writers.

Anj16 GOLD said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 11:58 am
Anj16 GOLD, Eagan, Minnesota
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments
i think originality is what writers should aim for. i could have done my research, reinforce the generally accepted idea, and in the end, produce a second-rate, copycat article. and one more thing, you don't speak for all the writers.

Desanyx SILVER said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 9:10 am
Desanyx SILVER, Westfield, New Jersey
5 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
The imagination is man's power over nature. -Wallace Stevens

I'm afraid that you have really NOT done your research, you have gotten the siren interpretation entirely wrong. If you want to work with the entity you have created, fine, but do NOT for the sake of all fantasy writers out there call her a siren.

dandanDERP said...
on Oct. 3 2009 at 12:40 am
Your style is brilliant. Keep up the good work! (:

Anj16 GOLD said...
on Oct. 3 2009 at 12:00 am
Anj16 GOLD, Eagan, Minnesota
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments
Thanks you.

RLJoy DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 11:19 am
RLJoy DIAMOND, Glen Rock, New Jersey
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This acticle is very well written. It's amazing!!!!!!!!!! ur a very talented writer!

Anj16 GOLD said...
on Sep. 26 2009 at 11:29 pm
Anj16 GOLD, Eagan, Minnesota
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments
lol thanks guys. your comments made my day. and this was like the best day ever because it's homecoming dance. you just like doubled the excitement

RobEJ BRONZE said...
on Sep. 26 2009 at 8:05 pm
RobEJ BRONZE, Louisville, Kentucky
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This is an incredible piece of work, very concise! The final sentence really concluded it well. Continue writing

tor10jax GOLD said...
on Sep. 26 2009 at 7:30 pm
tor10jax GOLD, Livingston, New Jersey
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You are a really good writer. I can't write like that for my life. Good job! (Sorry, I have no advice).

Keep writing!