The Stranger

February 15, 2010
By serendipitous615 PLATINUM, Frederick, Maryland
serendipitous615 PLATINUM, Frederick, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"Do you want to know the secret of self esteem? Here it is: If you want confidence, then understand how much you matter to God. If God loves you, who cares what anybody else thinks."

The couch is still warm from his body that laid upon it. But his presence has disappeared as the sun peaks above the tall skyscrapers. There’s an indent on the black pillow from his head, and the blanket, draped on the couch, is positioned like he is still beneath it. But as I touch it, to perhaps feel as if I’m with him once again, I feel abandoned and alone.
He left a note on the door and the ink is smudged. It says: thank you for giving me a home for the night. But no name is left for me to find him.
I wonder why I didn’t get out of bed once I heard the front door shut. Or why I didn’t tell him to stay for a while. I wonder where he went. If back to the ally beside to eccentric clothing store I just happened to stop in.
I don’t know why I feel this way. Something comforting and familiar about him made me feel safe. He made me feel happy and weightless; I want him to come back. But now that he’s gone, I feel as if my heart was ripped from my chest and the tears are about to spill from the lids holding them back.
I feel as if I loved him. Something about him lures me in and makes me want to run away with him, who seems like the love of my life.
Maybe that’s why I took him in…
I lay on the couch where he did. I wrapped the blanket around me and felt the first of many tears slide down my face.
A knock at the door made me sit up and hold back the tears that wanted so badly to fall. I opened it to the 20 year old boy that just slept in the couch in my living room.
“I forgot my hat.” I stepped aside and let him take the hat off the chair. I took a look at him, from the blue eyes that sharpen his face to the hand carved heart between his thumb and first finger. One that looks exactly like the one Jack Marshall put on my hand when we were twelve.
He moved but said to me right before he did, he’d find me again someday.
I looked up at his face from his hand. “Jack?” he looked over and I walked to him just as he was opening the door to leave forever. “Where are you going?”
“I’m not sure,” he said.
I pulled up my sleeve on my shirt and showed him the heart. “It’s me Jack, you found me”

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This article has 8 comments.

on Jul. 6 2010 at 4:16 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

I love this, so cute and sweet, great dynamics and very well-written.  Nice job.

on Feb. 27 2010 at 1:29 am
enchanted4yu PLATINUM, Calabasas, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't tell me the sky is the limit when there are footprints on the moon"

This is one of the cutest love stories I've read on Teen Ink! Something about it is very different and I love how it starts with Jack being gone. Very well done :)

on Feb. 21 2010 at 10:58 pm
the-ampersand PLATINUM, Ogdensbury, New York
32 articles 1 photo 106 comments
well, it'd be nice to have some background info, but other than that, it was really nice, short and sweet with good form. loved it! =.=

on Feb. 21 2010 at 2:31 pm
mellow_melon PLATINUM, Jefferson, Maryland
41 articles 14 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take, but my the number of moments that take our breath away."

i love it!!! so cute

on Feb. 21 2010 at 12:18 pm
alwayswriting14 SILVER, Northport, New York
7 articles 1 photo 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything makes sense yet nothing makes sense."

This was a really well done piece! I am with LostAngel also but great job!

on Feb. 21 2010 at 11:04 am
Mykindapeopledontcarewhatyouthink BRONZE, Gueydan, Louisiana
2 articles 0 photos 124 comments
i love it it's beautiful and descriptive

on Feb. 20 2010 at 10:58 pm
contrygurl BRONZE, Sanbernardino, California
4 articles 0 photos 117 comments

Favorite Quote:
to love and to be loved is lifes greatest joy

omgushers!!!!!!! love and im totally with lostangel!!!!!!

on Feb. 20 2010 at 6:29 pm
LostAngel DIAMOND, Jersey, New Jersey
65 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Just live your life, if people don't like the way you are doing it then they can get out of it" "if you can't stand me at my worst you dont deserve me at my best"

Its so cute, but wait, was he trying to find her or was she trying to find him thats my only question


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