Pretty Eyes- Chapter 4

February 1, 2010
By torridromance GOLD, Staten Island, New York
torridromance GOLD, Staten Island, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Define normal." ~Eragon


I did NOT expect what happened next. Mitchell took that as his cue to kiss me. ME. He did. He kissed me. I didn’t know what to say. I was confused, filled with love and hatred at the same time. I didn’t know what to think. Then he whispered to me. “I love you Alexa.” I staggered back like a drunkard, looking into his gorgeous eyes the whole time. They kept me there. His arms wrapped around me like I was a little doll or a puppy. I went limp, and he held me up.

“I...I...don’t....know what... to say.....” I stammered. I had never felt this way, so confused.

“Say yes. Say you will go to homecoming with me. Say you will go out with me. Say you love me. Or tell me to go away, and I will never come back and I will go to the other end of the earth so you never have to see me again. I love you. Say anything.”

“Yes.”

“Yes what?” He asked, confused and concerned.

“Yes, I will go to homecoming with you. Promise me something though.”

“Anything for you freak.”

“Promise me that you won’t call me freak ever again. Promise me that I can call you pretty eyes. Promise me you will hold me up if I am weak. Promise me that if I ask you to let go, you will. Promise me that you truly love me.”

“Yes times five, I promise.”

“Good.” And he kissed me again. This time, I didn’t care if the whole world was watching. I had found him in those pretty eyes.


The author's comments:
The fourth in a four part short story. I hope you like it. :-)

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on Oct. 19 2013 at 7:15 pm
GzusFreak10 GOLD, Staten Island, New York
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Throwback...dang, a lot has happened since this!   Although i WOULD enjoy a homecoming/prom chapter...maybe one in which Mackenzie and Marissa finally get together against impossible odds? ;)

on Jan. 6 2011 at 1:22 pm
Sam_Wolfe SILVER, Staten Island, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass. It's about learning to dance in the rain."

HOW CAN YOU LEAVE US AT THE END OF A CLIFF OF DRAMA?!?!?! Now we'll never know what happens at homecoming! You should write a 5th chapter. That's all i hafta say. C: Less than 3!

on Dec. 29 2010 at 11:01 pm
inksplatteredfingerz SILVER, Union, New Jersey
8 articles 4 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Where I'm from, we believe all sorts of things that aren't true--we call it history."--the Wizard; Wicked

wait, why was this posted twice? thats weird o.O. sorry about that!

on Dec. 24 2010 at 5:14 pm
inksplatteredfingerz SILVER, Union, New Jersey
8 articles 4 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Where I'm from, we believe all sorts of things that aren't true--we call it history."--the Wizard; Wicked

I totally agree. That happened ridiciously fast. This part is cute, but I feel like this conversation should be like...the epilogue or something. Like 20years later when their married!

Ok, now I have to be the hated critic. This is gonna suck.

Ok. What are the chances of this happening? I mean seriously? Your talking to a guy and all of a sudden he starts shoving his tongue down your throat. And if it did, would you  be ok with that? Alexa starts to think that Mitchell's cute--but that doesn't mean she's head over heels in love. She should've pushed him off right then and there. Plus, they're aren't alone, you know. Their buds are like, 3feet away from them. Talk about awkward o.O.

Am I coming across as a heartless unromantic(well, i kind of am)? Cuz i did like the story, but this part didn't work for me. I see alot of potential in it and alot of hopeless romantics will fall head over heels for Mitchell.


on Mar. 20 2010 at 11:07 am
torridromance GOLD, Staten Island, New York
12 articles 1 photo 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Define normal." ~Eragon

Yeah, it did move a little fast. I should have made it longer =_= But thank you!

on Mar. 20 2010 at 11:06 am
torridromance GOLD, Staten Island, New York
12 articles 1 photo 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Define normal." ~Eragon

Aw, thanks!

on Mar. 15 2010 at 7:17 am
SunnySummers GOLD, New York, New York
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I agree!! It was one of the shortest stories I've ever read, and I was surprised at how quickly you developed the characters! =)

on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:54 pm
GzusFreak10 GOLD, Staten Island, New York
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*sniff, sniff* That was so beautiful! Where's a Kleenex when I need one? lol. <3 it<3 it, <3 it!

on Feb. 20 2010 at 4:00 pm
torridromance GOLD, Staten Island, New York
12 articles 1 photo 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Define normal." ~Eragon

Thank you! Yeah, once I read it over a few times, I did realize it moved rather quickly...

MariahMundi said...
on Feb. 16 2010 at 7:32 pm
a little fast, i like how the characters developed personalities, and the bus stop thing was really fast. good plot though.. (:


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