A Teenage Love Story 2

September 29, 2009
It was a warm June night, the sun just a glimpse above the horizon, with a slight breeze, brushing lightly against my skin. I could feel my dark brown hair flowing with the direction of the wind as i went round and round on the carousel. I closed my eyes and listened to the soft carnival music in the background of people talking and laughing. Even with my eyes closed, I could still see the joyful faces of children, their eyes wide with excitement, their parents watching them carefully and happily. I smiled, capturing the moment. I made sure to mentally write down all the details in my head, so I could retell it exactly to my parents. It’s been nearly a week since I last seen them and would be another month or two until I would see them again, although before leaving they made me promise to call them whenever I wanted but at least, once a week. Their 20th anniversary was last week, so as my gift, I decided to go stay with my aunt in California for the summer. As my mind drifted to my home back in New Jersey, I felt the carousel slowly come to a stop. I gently opened my eyes and let out a happy sigh. I laughed as I struggled to get off my carousel horse. Feeling dizzy, I went to find a place to sit. As I sat down on a nearby bench, my eyes swept the carnival for a corndog stand. Aha. Spotting one, I started walking towards it. Halfway there, knowing I was supposed to call my aunt at 9:30, I decided to see what time it was. I looked down in my bag and began searching for my phone. Suddenly, I ran into someone. “Sorr-“, I looked up unexpectedly into the striking blue eyes of a drop dead gorgeous stranger. He looked about my age, if not a year older and was an inch taller than me. No words could even begin to describe him.
My heart pounding, I tried to catch my breath. Just when I thought he couldn’t get any hotter, Gorgeous Stranger smiled, making his eyes twinkle and my conclusion rip into shreds. Finally catching my breath again, I tried to speak again. “Sorry, I wasn’t watching where I was going, I….My…..Sorry” I stuttered. He laughed, and then smiled again. “Don’t be”, he said. Even the sound of his voice made my heart explode. He held out his hand. “I’m Jonah, by the way “I held out my hand, meeting his. My hand tingled. “Skyler’ I said back, matching his smile. “Do you live around here? I don’t think I’ve seen you around town before.” Deep breathes, deep breathes, I thought to myself. “N-No, I’m just visiting my Aunt for the summer. I live in New Jersey. What about you??” I asked. “I moved here about five years ago from Portland Oregon, so I’ve lived here for some time. How long are you staying with your aunt?” His eyes seemed to sink into mine; making it seem as though each thing I said really mattered. As if I really mattered. My heart fluttered as though it were a butterfly trying to escape. The odd, yet amazing thing was, that, even though it was breathe taking, I loved the feeling of excitement. I wanted to jump up and scream, as though a bubbly volcano had erupted. I could feel it building inside me, as his eyes continued to stare into mine. I loved the way he_oh, wait, he asked me a question. It was hard to concentrate on anything when I was staring at him. He was so beautiful, with th-C***, I was doing it again. Okay, Okay, answer the question, Skyler. “F-F-For the summer”, I said. Ahhhh! Why do I keep stuttering? He probably thinks I have a speaking disorder, I thought. He smiled again.” Cool, maybe we can hang out sometime. I could show you around town, if you’d like”, he said. Oh yes, Skyler would like, Skyler would like Very Much…. “Sure, that sounds like fun. When would y-“, I started to ask, but suddenly I was cut off. “Jonah! I’ve been looking all over for you pookie poo! “ I turned to see who rudely interrupted me, and saw a gorgeous blonde walking toward us with two almost as equally gorgeous girls, one taller, the other average height. The one who was taller was also blonde, but the average height one was a brunette. Judging by the way the gorgeous blonde was walking just slightly ahead of them, I could tell she was the leader of their group. And judging by the look she was giving me, I could tell she wasn’t too fond of me. Great, I already have someone who hates my guts. I sighed. Super. They all seemed to walk in unison, and as if they owned the place, like they were better than everyone else. Their eyes weren’t exactly friendly. As they got closer, I could see two guys with them, who seemed to trail the other two like puppies, obviously their boyfriends. I realized in disappointment that the leader didn’t seem to have one, but apparently wanted one, by the seducing look she was giving Jonah. My stomach turned. “Hey Tara. Hey Steph, hey Cammie. What’s up John, Caleb?” Jonah said to them all, giving me an apologetic look. So the leader was Tara, the two behind her were Steph and Cammie, and the guys were John and Caleb,I thought, hoping I could remember which is which. As they reached where we were standing, Tara went and stood by Jonah; very close, I might add, while the others sort of circled around. Tara wrapped her arms around Jonah. “Where have you been, we looked all over for you!” she said. She gave me a dirty look. “Who are you? C***. Someone call B**** 911. I smiled at my little snide comment, and was tempted to laugh when I saw that my little grin seemed to annoy Tara. Jonah, however, seemed to look amused again. With a deep breath, I told myself that I would remain neutral if anything should happen. At least for now, HeHe. “Hi, I’m Skyler. I’m visiting here from New Jersey for the summer.”Nice. I smiled to myself. Lets just hope I could stay calm for the rest of the night.

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jimmy_knows_stuff said...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 8:35 am
Emiri replied...
Nov. 12, 2011 at 7:01 pm
Dude, the bad words are all star-ed out. Some advice, there are bad words everywhere in real life- embrace them or be stuck using caps like a spammer for the rest of your life.
amesgriffey said...
Nov. 6, 2011 at 7:38 am
I reallly enjoyed this story! can you keep going? its really good! Keep writing!
Imperfectlife said...
Oct. 16, 2011 at 5:00 pm

It's very detailed and funny, I want to hear more!


ThePeaceDaisy said...
Oct. 16, 2011 at 3:19 pm
My name's Tara...but I'm nice! Lol nice job, by the way!
Laura_Oliver said...
Sept. 24, 2011 at 3:31 pm
Spectacular job! You have my eternal respect. One thing, though: I don't know if this was intentional or not, but you should have spaced the paragraphs properly (no offense, really). Otherwise this is pure perfection. Plus, I would really appreciate it if you could check out some of my work and leave some feedback.
monkeyface replied...
Sept. 24, 2011 at 5:18 pm

azing..and i understand the bi t chi ness too..been there..had ot deal with that..all so good

there wasnt to much detail so it wasnt overlaoded but it was enouh do i could beome Skylar..

pplease write part two..pplase

Eveine said...
Sept. 14, 2011 at 2:57 pm

please post the rest its good and i wish i was talented as u!!!


StarStrukk said...
Sept. 2, 2011 at 12:41 pm
one word for you... INCREDIBLE
pink pompom said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 5:49 pm
yeah, dont apologize...who cares about the paragraphs? you're a wicked awesome writer!!
pink pompom said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 5:45 pm
yayyy, i love it!! i write a lil romance too, but you are by far my superior in  a) humor b) description and c) about everything else...:) SOOO good! Smiles. the writing rocks!!! I will see you on the shelf of my library someday.
writerfreak21231 said...
Aug. 11, 2011 at 5:33 pm
wow that was amazing! ur an awesome writer!!!! if anyone had time could you check out my new story called Terror out of this world: The whole story
Iluvmybff said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 7:48 am
I really like this. You are an amzing writer!:) This has so much details and power behind it. It makes me wish that something like that would happen to me
Ellimee said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 12:06 pm
A couple run-on sentences blend too much in the second paragraph. But romance is your writing ability! Seriously! Your description makes ME feel like I'm in love, and I'm horrible when it comes to romance! Keep it going!
Kat4ever333 said...
Jun. 30, 2011 at 1:03 pm
i want more!its so good
kyokofirealice1 said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 9:38 pm
im a real sucker for romanse stories and although i think it was confusing how we met most of the characters at the same time, i enjoyed them and how they met:) oh! and im in love with the carnival setting, and its descriptions:) cant wait for more (2thumbs up!!)
shadowrider said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 6:18 pm
There weren't any paragraphs though, which makes the readability difficult and the dialogue could use a bit of work. Over all great job!
shadowrider said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 6:17 pm
This was really well written. Not overly poetic, but with just enough description, a great voice, and wonderful flow. Amazing job! I can't wait for the second part!
Eke0505 said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 5:30 am
I really like the descriptions used, not only to describe the setting but the characters as well. However, you might want to work on the dialogue as well as make the plot a bit more interesting to avoid it from getting too cliche. However, it's a good try, and if you keep working on it I'm sure it'll end up being a great piece of work!
a dream girl said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 2:04 am
I love it,you should keep writing it,I am looking forward to reading it!
fizzaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 1:55 am
it sounds incomplete but its nice.
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