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First Kiss

By , Boston, MA
“Come closer” he says. I walk across the front porch moving lingeringly threw the summer night air. I stop to breathe it in. It fills me with an energy that crackles through my body jump-starting my heart. It beats loudly. I feel it in me as it throws itself against my chest. I feel its swelling pulse in my wrists and fingertips. I feel it in the bottom of my stomach.
I lean against the railing facing him but I can’t look at him.
“Closer.” His voice is deep and hoarse. I feel him scrutinizing me. He slides two fingers into a belt loop on either side of my hips and pulls me to him. I laugh and finally look up. He was smiling broadly down at me. He continues staring. Not wanting to be the first to look away but finding the tension unbearable i cannot help but to look down yet again. He unclasps a hand from behind my waist and lifts it to my face. As he did so it shook.

“I guess I’m more nervous than I thought I’d be” he says in that same low voice. He tilts my face towards his. His stare remains unbroken but the smile has vanished and a new intensity has overwhelmed his face. Then slowly, he kisses me.




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Carolyn Jo S. said...
Jun. 23, 2010 at 9:55 pm:
Aww i love it... kinda wish my first kiss was like that. that is so romantic... very good :)
 
Let_It_Be replied...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 11:10 pm :
i havent had my first kiss yet. i hope it turns out like this!!! <3
 
Peace.Love.Music. replied...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 7:39 pm :
Don't we all want our first kiss to be like that? I wanted mine to be romantic and special, but I got it behind the dumpsters at school. He gave me a five minute speech first about taking our relationship to the next level. I was like "umm.. I'm 13, so shutup an kiss me?" haha.
 
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Anonymous99 said...
Jun. 23, 2010 at 11:18 am:
You used a great amount of imagery to the point that I felt I was right there watching!Like swimchick said"I suggest you not say I so much". The last sentence could use imagery to. Again the short story was great! :)
 
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charlygee said...
Jun. 23, 2010 at 9:28 am:

That was adorable! Very descriptive and realistic. :)

If you have a moment, will you check out/comment on my work?

 
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gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 23, 2010 at 7:01 am:

That's really sweet, very welll described.  Great job.  Keep writing!

Btw, will you check out and comment on my work?

 
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CassieSherman14This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 10, 2010 at 10:15 pm:

aww! that's sooo cute! you should write more...

 

 
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polyprincess16 said...
May 10, 2010 at 9:23 pm:
SO CUTE!!! really good imagery & description. i really loved it, but i also wish you would have continued on...keep writing!
 
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ShannonVictoria said...
Apr. 18, 2010 at 11:50 pm:
Good Job!!! It was so cute and...haha idk. i really liked it though. good job. :D:D:D:D
 
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Ally25 said...
Apr. 18, 2010 at 7:02 pm:

This was awsome..good job.

 

 
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ShannonVictoria said...
Mar. 27, 2010 at 7:31 pm:
awww! i love it! its sooooo cute and sweet! Nice Job!
 
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hayhayrene said...
Mar. 27, 2010 at 8:17 am:
okay this is just simply amaing
 
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SwimChick said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 4:43 pm:
Okay, I liked this. A lot actually, it was a very good story.
That being said I would suggest you not saying I so much, it seems to take away from the breathataking scene you're going for here.
This is an excellent shortstory anyways though,
excellent job
 
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little-miss-sunshine said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 3:51 pm:
You definitely have a basis for something there. The descriptions were beautiful! I'd love to see this put into a story.
 
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ClockworkLightbulb said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 2:55 pm:
This is really good. short and sweet. (;
 
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iloveryoualot said...
Jan. 20, 2010 at 2:30 pm:
I thought that this was really good and I hope that you write more
 
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Lisette-Midnight said...
Dec. 29, 2009 at 11:11 am:
This is wonderful!!!!
 
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megstar96 said...
Nov. 13, 2009 at 5:25 pm:
love it!!!
 
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tgir85 said...
Oct. 23, 2009 at 9:30 pm:
OMG!!!! its awesome!!!!! great !!!! your very descriptive!!!! I LOVE IT!!! write more!!:D
 
Kauro-Dono replied...
Nov. 13, 2009 at 10:23 am :
I couldn't agree more!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
VanillaTwilight replied...
Mar. 27, 2010 at 9:22 pm :
ditto! encore! encore!
 
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