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Intensity

June 13, 2009
By Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell


The tears poured off her eyelids; slid down her cheeks; fell to the floor. Slowly she sank to the ground, trembling slightly. Her breath came in deep sobs, wracking her chest. She barely had enough air. She did not hear the soft footfalls coming ever closer. She did not see him as he sat down next to her. She did, however, feel as his arm wrapped around her shoulders. Turning slightly, the girl buried her face in his shoulder. Her friend held her tighter, resting his head in her soft chestnut curls.

The two of them sat that way for what felt like hours; the girl sobbing loudly on the boy’s shoulder, the boy holding her quietly, steadfastly. Finally, the girl released her last tear. She looked up at the boy, eyes red from crying, cheeks flushed. He turned to her, a small crooked smile on his lips. To the girl’s surprise, tears were slipping down his face as well. “Why are you crying?” she asked softly, voice cracking. The boy considered the question for a second.

“I am crying because you are crying,” he replied truthfully as yet another tear trickled down his handsome face. His smile was still there, unwavering.

The girl stared at him with wide eyes. He stared back at her. A chill like an electric current flowed through both of them. The air around them tingled with static. Slowly, as if pulled by some invisible force, the two teenagers moved closer. Their faces were within a hair’s breath of each other’s. “Why me?” she whispered. “Why did you choose me?” Her eyes darted back and forth, looking for an answer written on his face. “You are the only one who’s real. The only one out of all those girls who knows what it means to truly love someone. Even though he broke your heart, you just keep going. I like that. I think… I think I may even love that.”

His eyes gleamed with a passion long suppressed. “I think I may love you.” His sweet breath lingered on her lips. The girl’s heart began to beat frantically, as if trying to keep up with her rapidly changing emotions. “I think I may love you too,” she admitted.

Without meaning to, the girl shut her eyes. The two leaned even closer, closing the gap between them. His soft lips pressed against hers. She wrapped her arms around his neck, and his arms coiled around her waist. The kiss deepened.

Gently, they pulled apart. Both were smiling softly. “Thank you,” the girl said under her breath, so quiet that the boy sitting right next to her wasn’t sure he had heard her at first.

“For what?” She stared deeply into his eyes. He held her gaze, reciprocating the intensity. “For giving me a reason to live again. For saving me from falling.”

“Anytime. Thank you, too. Thanks for letting me in. Thanks for not pushing me away.”

At the same time, the two teenagers said, “I love you,” sealing their fate.

The two leaned in closer, their foreheads, then lips, pressing against the other’s.



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on Jun. 27 2010 at 6:44 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Thank you:)

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 5:10 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

O.O  oh my god! *faints*

XD I think my life has just been made by your comment. Swear to god. Thank you so much, really honestly truly!!!! That means so much to me!! To know that you think of my work like that... *goes off and faints again*

anyways thank you SOOO much!!!!!! XDD And I definately will keep writing, that's for sure!


Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 5:04 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

:3 thank you so so much!!! X3333 everyone here is so nice!!!!!!!! It makes me so happy! :)

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:56 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

XD Is a simple thank you enough for a comment as nice and thoughtful as this? No, I didn't think so either! So thank you very very much for your opinion! I'm ecstatic that you find this piece to your liking and that you really felt something while reading! Comments like yours keep up my moral! :D Thank you!!!!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:51 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thank you very very much!!! I'm glad to hear that some people can actually feel the emotions--that's always something I strive for when writing. Again thank you!!! :D

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:49 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

XD *squeals* thank you thank youu!! And sure, I'll take a look as soon as I have some spare time! It's the least I can do! :D

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:48 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thanks! :D

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:48 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

:D heehee thank you bunches!! and I agree, a lot of people would!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:47 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thank you! :)

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:44 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

:DDD Thank you soo much!!!! haha that just made my day much better!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:43 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thank you ! I'm glad you liked it!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:43 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Oh, thank you so so much! :D And sure, I'll do that as soon as I get a spare moment!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:42 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

awe thanks! :3 I'm glad you like it!

love2run GOLD said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 2:25 pm
love2run GOLD, Star Valley, Wyoming
12 articles 4 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I failed my way to success." Thomas Edison
"What kind of crazy nut would spend two or three hours a day just running?" Pre
"A ship in harbor is safe, but that's not what ships are built for." John Shedd

haha thanks!! :)

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 1:52 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thank you!! and no problem, I'll go do that right now!

love2run GOLD said...
on Jun. 13 2010 at 9:49 pm
love2run GOLD, Star Valley, Wyoming
12 articles 4 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I failed my way to success." Thomas Edison
"What kind of crazy nut would spend two or three hours a day just running?" Pre
"A ship in harbor is safe, but that's not what ships are built for." John Shedd

this is really good! haha it was sweet and not awkward at all, unlike some romantic short stories. great job, keep it up!!!

 

and btw do you think you could check out my poem Bittersweet Beginning and give some feedback? Thanks!


on Jun. 13 2010 at 9:08 pm
chelseabelle BRONZE, Tampa, Florida
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wow really amazing. please check out my story!  :) TeenInk.com/fiction/romance/article/211019/Letters-to-the-Moon/

kksme SILVER said...
on Jun. 13 2010 at 6:37 pm
kksme SILVER, Greenvale, New York
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That was so cute!

on Jun. 13 2010 at 6:18 pm
Soccergirl1418 BRONZE, Hubbard, Oregon
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I love it!! it is amazing! i love the detail!

necnec said...
on Jun. 13 2010 at 5:54 pm
necnec, Summit, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Malice towards none and charity towards all"

Adorable! congratz this was so cute