A Little Get-Together (ABCs) MAG

July 31, 2013
By Dominicolodeon PLATINUM, Norfolk, Virginia
Dominicolodeon PLATINUM, Norfolk, Virginia
30 articles 1 photo 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Write fast. Write far.

Abigail sits brooding in the corner, glaring at Katrina.
Bailey sits brooding in a different one, glaring at Abigail.
Cameron uncorks a bottle of wine in the kitchen.
Dawn speaks loudly of her “exciting new internship” to anyone who will listen.
Erica reapplies makeup in the restroom.
Fiancé knocks on the front door and wonders if anyone other than the bride even knows his name.
Garret is getting punched in the face in the backyard.
Harriet laughs convincingly.
Irving steals an olive from the glass of the person beside him.
Jay stubs his toe.
Katrina opens the door for her fiancé and wonders about Patrick.
Lily taps on the fish tank.
Manny wonders where his olive went.
Nancy hates her name.
Oscar punches Garret in the face.
Patrick drives by the house, considers stopping, then decides against it.
Quinn pretends to listen to Dawn.
Robin catches Jay, and their eyes meet.
Stewart tries to remember his soon-to-be-son-in-law's name as he welcomes him into the house.
Theo scoops up Lily and puts her on his shoulder.
Ulrich jokingly offers to trade names with Nancy.
Violet tells Harriet another bad joke.
Wilson paces impatiently as his wife powders her nose in the restroom.
Xavier is almost run over by Patrick.
Yvette rushes to the backyard to hold Oscar back.
Zachariah makes a toast to the future newlyweds.

The author's comments:
This was an exercise I gave myself, to see if I could write a story with these certain restrictions.

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This article has 4 comments.

on Aug. 1 2013 at 5:05 pm
fountainpen GOLD, Huntington Beach, California
11 articles 1 photo 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't tell anybody anything—If you do, you'll start missing everybody."
—J.D. Salinger

“I like people and I like them to like me, but I wear my heart where God put it, on the inside.”
—F. Scott Fitzgerald

I like the the sparse, factual qualtity of this piece. The style reminds me of Lynne Rae Perkins (author of Criss Cross). It's written like a long list of facts, only with more depth and meaning.

on Aug. 1 2013 at 9:09 am
RelativetoWriting GOLD, Brecksville, Ohio
13 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do I contradict myself? Very well, then I contradict myself, I am large, I contain multitudes."
-Walt Whitman

Wow, I've never read anything like this before! I like the crisp, short declarative sentences that hold more meaning than one would assume and the other side of perspective from the character interactions.

on Jul. 31 2013 at 7:40 pm
Dominicolodeon PLATINUM, Norfolk, Virginia
30 articles 1 photo 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Write fast. Write far.

Thanks so much! I was working on this at YWW but rewrote a lot of it this morning. I wanted to try to capture just a brief point in time from all these different perspectives.

on Jul. 31 2013 at 7:35 pm
liveloud70x7 SILVER, Private, California
6 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You do not immortalize the lost by writing about them. Language buries, but does not resurrect.” --john green

"self-consciousness is the enemy of all creativity" --ray bradbury

"We suffer each other to have each other a while." -Li-Young Lee

nich, this is so clever! I'm amazed. I'm following you on teenink now! btw, this is esther :) 


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