Kiwi Link; Introduction

September 27, 2011
By introducingshelby GOLD, San Diego, California
introducingshelby GOLD, San Diego, California
15 articles 1 photo 139 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People change so you can learn to let go, things go wrong so you can appreciate them when they go right, and things fall apart so better things can fall together."
-Marilyn Monroe


If you ever find yourself in Louisiana, and you’re wandering aimlessly around from town to town without any direction or clue, drive yourself down the road a little, past the barns and the plains, and you’ll find yourself in the center of Rosedale Hill. Deep in the humid, muggy center of Louisiana, in a town off the corner of High and State, a little cluster of houses stand. Little puffs of smoke blow out their chimneys in the winter, and thin garments hang on the clothespins on each and every lawn in the summer.

And there, outside the fourth residence on Prosperity Lane, a faded mailbox leans crookedly against a tree. Barely visible beneath the cracked paint, you’ll just be able to make out LINK written in swirly penmanship. The prettiest little house in Rosedale by far, with red brick walls and a bright yellow door; Mrs. Link is surely cooking up some beans with rice in the kitchen. Mr. Link, perhaps, is driving home on the bumpy road, exhausted from another listless day at the office.

Kiwi, without a doubt, is rocking back and forth on her swing set. Her hair in pigtails and her feet high up in the air, her head titled back as she laughs at the sky, she’s got absolutely nothing on her mind but this precise moment.

A petite girl of nearly 5’’2, with a mile wide smile and a laugh like tinkling wind chimes, Kiwi’s eyes glitter brighter than the night sky. Never has she ever left her little hometown of Rosedale Hill, but she sure as heck plans to.

At first glance, you’d instantly feel warmer. A tingly feeling would overcome you, making you suddenly aware of everything around you—the air, the way the leaves snap and crackle under your foot like crisps, the sun just setting beyond the church’s steeple. Maybe you would even pinch yourself, to make sure you’re not dreaming.

But when the girl goes back into her house, sliding off the rubber seat and bounding through the door, the essence of her would remain. You would still feel her presence, her warmth.

Why, she wouldn’t be gone at all.


The author's comments:
If any of you have read my Kiwi Link novel, then you're familiar with Kiwi and her friends. I've revised it a little, and this is the new beginning for Kiwi Link! (You can check out the original beginning and the full story on my page, titled Kiwi Link.) Feedback could be kind of wonderful, so feel free to talk to me, thanks c:

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on Oct. 2 2011 at 7:38 pm
introducingshelby GOLD, San Diego, California
15 articles 1 photo 139 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People change so you can learn to let go, things go wrong so you can appreciate them when they go right, and things fall apart so better things can fall together."
-Marilyn Monroe

Wow hey thanks man c: I really appreciate that! Hopefully I'll post the next few chapters soon; I think you'll like it- especially if you liked this revised intro.

on Sep. 30 2011 at 5:48 pm
Kvothe28 SILVER, Temecula, California
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Favorite Quote:
Excuse me while I prepare my impromptu remarks. -Winston Churchill

Tell it like it is, not how it was. -Jonathan

Break it down like a fine English double-gun. -R. Bitoni

I really like your voice, and the description of Kiwi and Rosedale hill were awesome. =) 5 stars

on Sep. 30 2011 at 4:55 pm
TheGirlWhoDancesWithSnowflakes SILVER, Sunnyvale, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Duct tape is like the force. It has a light side, a dark side, and it holds the world together."

Friendship is born at that moment when one person says to another,
"What! You too? I thought I was the only one."
- C. S. Lewis

Your writing style is amazing! I really wanna read this, so you need to continue! :)

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on Sep. 30 2011 at 12:47 pm
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
12 articles 4 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Explaining a joke is like dissecting a frog: you understand it better, but the frog dies in the process." -E.B. White

I love the way you tell this story! It seems so magical... I wanna read this!




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