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The Perfect Day

January 11, 2011
By pandax22 BRONZE, Mt. Pleasant, Pennsylvania
pandax22 BRONZE, Mt. Pleasant, Pennsylvania
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As we browsed through a path of orchids on that mid-summer’s day, I then knew the meaning of life.
As I looked down at my Forever Wildflower seeds commemorating his life lived, I closed my eyes as I drifted away to my perfect day.
As I sat and watched the sun rise slowly over the mountaintops at the cabin, a teardrop swiftly fell from my cheek onto ground. The sunrise always burns a picture of him in the back of my mind. The family cabin was his favorite place. Sitting on the hillside while staring blankly off into the mountains, I smell a distinct scent that I could pick out anywhere. It was the scent of my Uncle Ric.
The scent was that of a strong, unique cologne that I have never smelled anything like it before. When I would smell it, I knew he was near. This was always a comforting factor to me. But this time, the scent was different. It felt as if there was a presence along with the scent. It was almost as if I was afraid.
I heard a deer sprint onward in the other direction I was staring. As I turned my head to observe, it was nowhere to be found. I then felt the presence next to me. Turning my head back to where I was staring originally, a man was sitting five feet away from me. That man was my deceased Uncle Ric.

A rush of emotions quickly inflicted upon my heart. Cry or smile? I did not know. He graciously touched my hand and said, “It is alright. You are safe. Walk with me.”
It felt as if it was a dream. Seeing my Uncle again, I did not believe was an option until you are welcomed in to heaven. If anything, I knew his presence was real. We walked through the forest for hours; talking about life’s lessons and heaven. I asked him what it was like up there and if he missed us. His response then, made me not so afraid to die.
He told me he saw all of our reactions the day we discovered that he had died of cardiac arrest. He described my mother’s reaction when she found out, and that he knows she thinks of him with each passing day.
The sun was beaming through the trees as we grazed along; reminiscing about how much he left unsaid to my mother and our family. He wanted me to tell her how much he loves her, and always will. However, he wanted me to tell her one important thing; “Remember me and smile, for it is better to forget than remember me and cry. Death ends a life, not a relationship.”
Noon was soon approaching, and before we began our journey, he said that God only sent him from the heavens until noon. I just then had realized this, and quickly became saddened.

He took my hand one last time as we walked our last path through the orchids. Luminous colors of different shades of pink flourished around us. The sun’s radiance reflected tears filling up in my eyes. Smiling, he gracefully stroked the side of my face while wiping away my tears.
Suddenly, a bright light beamed between the tress. I knew it was his time to go. He slowly let his hand fall from my cheek. The last words he spoke to me that day burn in the back of my mind.
Whenever you miss me, look at the Forever Wildflower seeds. When the pain becomes too much to bear, plant them. When the wildflowers soon appear, you will feel a sense of warmth. I am always here with you. Love is how you stay alive, even after you are gone. Always remember that. I love you. I’ll be seeing you..
My perfect day would not be so perfect without a perfect ending. If I had the power, I would do something that no one would expect me to do.
To have the perfect day, I would let my mother live this. One last time.


The author's comments:
This piece of work was inspired by my Uncle Ric who died suddenly at the age of 50. I hope that people will understand it and relate to it; parallel to the saying, "Love never dies."

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tib34 said...
on Jan. 18 2011 at 5:30 am
Wonderful story...I could picture everything in my mind..Great Job!

ace123 said...
on Jan. 17 2011 at 6:25 pm
Awesome job!!  Hope to read more from this author!!

mama jean said...
on Jan. 17 2011 at 12:58 pm
this was wonderful! The author has definite talent - the words took me to the day- I could feel the sun and the love. It gave me goosepimples. This author will go far!

Randy Kalp said...
on Jan. 16 2011 at 10:53 pm
My father passed when I was 5 so I could really relate to this story. It's funny the smells and little things you remember about a person after they pass on. The excellent descriptions and details drew me into the story and the insights, including the final line, "To have the perfect day, I would let my mother live this. One last time," left me with a reflective smile. Excellent job!

tyler84-07 said...
on Jan. 16 2011 at 6:34 pm
Beautiful writing, brought me to tears as I knew it would. Makes one wish for that one more chance to be close to someone that you have lost in life. Just to have that Perfect Day. Hope to be reading more from such a talented writer.

zachp1992 said...
on Jan. 16 2011 at 4:07 pm

really good writing amanda. very good article. never new you were such a good writer

 


Ryan M said...
on Jan. 16 2011 at 2:20 pm

 

Beautiful words..Proud of you Amanda..Great writing...


sueb28 said...
on Jan. 16 2011 at 8:06 am
Very powerful story. I was moved to tears! The writer really knows how to pull at your heart.

on Jan. 15 2011 at 6:16 pm
I must comment again......I want everyone to read this wonderful article and realize that there are not enough stars to rate this for this amazing young author........God Bless you Amanda.........and from me, you get an endless supply of stars..............Joseph

bandmom said...
on Jan. 15 2011 at 1:04 pm
Beautiful story.  How I would love to experience the beautiful meeting that she writes so eloquently about!  Wouldn't we all.  Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful story with everyone.   Hopefully you'll write many more and be able to share them all with the world!  We look forward to it!!! 

nate321 said...
on Jan. 15 2011 at 9:28 am
Wow!!  What an emotional story...very well written!!

loriz said...
on Jan. 15 2011 at 9:15 am
Very well written. Comes from the heart!

Raeriz said...
on Jan. 15 2011 at 7:43 am
Oh my goodness....such a beautiful story!  And so well written!  Made me cry...  I'm anxious to read this young woman's books someday when she's published!!!!

JScc92 said...
on Jan. 15 2011 at 7:01 am
This was beautifully written...gave me the chills !!  I have experienced time with loved ones that have passed and this reminded me of that special time.  Great job...nice to see a young woman express her feelings through writing...dont stop !!

Mrs. T said...
on Jan. 15 2011 at 6:50 am
While reading this, I had a permanent lump in my throat. The writer was able to grab my heart and run with it. This is excellent!! 

smiles3299 said...
on Jan. 14 2011 at 7:30 pm
Best thing that I have ever read in my life. Brought tears to my eyes. I know how the writer feels.

rambo55 said...
on Jan. 14 2011 at 7:27 pm
very well written and sounds true from the heart.. It is very real and is heartfelt to anyone who has experienced the loss of a loved one.

ParsonKRB said...
on Jan. 14 2011 at 6:19 pm
Death being part life - this is something everyone can relate to. I think we can all imagine having such a perfect day with someone we've loved and lost. Writing like this gives us pause to think about what our perfect day would be like. Moved me to tears.

MelanieK said...
on Jan. 14 2011 at 6:01 pm
You have a lovely way of describing emotions and making the reader feel and internalize their own memories of loved ones.  Thank you for having the courage to share this personal story of love and loss.

on Jan. 14 2011 at 6:01 pm
As an English teacher and someone who knows good writing when she sees it, I can honestly say that this is not good writing; it is superb. Ths young lady captures beautiful inner emotions though language in such a way that it invokes feeling in her readers. That is a rare gift, and I am happy she has shared this with us.


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