Tears Through the Mirror

June 27, 2010
By briannebohrman SILVER, Bethel, Connecticut
briannebohrman SILVER, Bethel, Connecticut
6 articles 2 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If God is the DJ, then life is the dance floor, love is the rhythm, and you are the music." -P!NK

"I know how it feels, filling in the blanks and looking to the bright side when there is no bright side."


The rough words spoke from your gentle chapped lips scraped my heart raw. Your eyes, they’re exhausted and cold. You stand in defeat, head down, shoulders hunched as you drop to your knees and silently sob to the tune of death. I peer curiously at your helpless body and extend my hand. But not far enough, not far enough for you to grasp. Because, do I want to help? Do I want to care? Or shall we just stay here pretending like I tried? I rest my head against the cold glass of the mirror and drop beside you. You’re so close yet so far, and together we are alone on this mission called life. I turn away from you and press my back flat against the smooth fingerprint smudged surface, cock my head back, and relive myself with a long piercing sob.


The author's comments:
Spur of the moment. Sort of just rolled out of my mind and onto the paper.

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on Aug. 30 2010 at 11:02 am
briannebohrman SILVER, Bethel, Connecticut
6 articles 2 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If God is the DJ, then life is the dance floor, love is the rhythm, and you are the music." -P!NK

"I know how it feels, filling in the blanks and looking to the bright side when there is no bright side."

Thank you. One thing I wondered before I go to edit this, is did you catch that the person she was trying to help was herself, as in her own reflection in the mirror? Or should I try to add something else in to make that more noticable? Your help is greatly appreciated :D

on Aug. 21 2010 at 4:08 pm
MaddieWo PLATINUM, Marstons Mills, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"If I'd a knowed more, I would a loved more." -Pilate Dead, Song of Solomon

Wow.. you captured emotions well.. I liked how the narrator offered help as an impulse then rethought it.


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