Epilepsy

March 2, 2010
By Emiline SILVER, Nashville, Tennessee
Emiline SILVER, Nashville, Tennessee
9 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When deep injury is done to us, we will never recover until we forgive. Forgiveness cannot change the past. But it does enlarge the future."- Mary Karen Read


Sometimes, when my world begins to shake, I can avoid it. I can hold on to something, or focus really hard, or clench my hands into fists. But not today. Today, it took me over. My hands, my arms, and soon my torso are all convulsing, and I can't stop it. Normally I just get tics, but today, someone decided it was my turn to have a seizure. As my entire body shakes, I faintly hear a voice ring out 'Call 911! She's having a seizure!' I feel strong hands grip me, to stop me from shaking, but they can't stop it. No one can.

'What happened?', I asked. I know I had a seizure, but why and when are a bit fuzzy. It's my mom who tells me. 'Hon, during your seizure, you hit your head pretty hard. The doctors said you have a pretty severe concussion, and they've diagnosed you with epilepsy.' 'Oh, god.' I whisper. 'Mom, I'm so sorry. It's my fault. It's all my fault....'
And it's not, but she can't know that. No one can.
Because of me, -no. I can't think about it. Not anymore.



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Emiline SILVER said...
on Apr. 27 2010 at 6:23 pm
Emiline SILVER, Nashville, Tennessee
9 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When deep injury is done to us, we will never recover until we forgive. Forgiveness cannot change the past. But it does enlarge the future."- Mary Karen Read

Wow, that really means alot. Especially coming from you. I'll def. work on it some more!

on Apr. 27 2010 at 4:15 pm
Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
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I'm glad you're a strong, beautiful person, and I'm thankful that you're willing to share your story with us!
Sorry it's taken me some time to get back with you. While your story is touching, it's pretty black and white. To add color, it'll need unique adjectives and some fresh metaphors. What do the emotions you feel do to you physically? If it were a color, what color would that emotion be? That color could flash across your eyes, like a crimson or a blinding silver.
How does your body shake? Is it like the limbs of a tree? Like the stretch of an accordion? The more images you give the reader to work with, the easier it will be for them to relate to you and to really FEEL the words you have to say. This is definitely a great start though, and I have faith that you'll be a really good writer some day soon!

Emiline SILVER said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 6:45 am
Emiline SILVER, Nashville, Tennessee
9 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When deep injury is done to us, we will never recover until we forgive. Forgiveness cannot change the past. But it does enlarge the future."- Mary Karen Read

I was happy to. I hope your sister doesn't have another seizure. I know how aful they can be, especially for those around at the time.

on Mar. 4 2010 at 6:11 pm
Rae_Flies_with_Byrds GOLD, Avondale, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality.
-Edgar Allan Poe

This reminded me of my sister. She was diagnosed with epilepsy at the age seven. It makes me think about her future, and will happen to her later on in life, like if she'll have another big seizure. Thank you for writing this.


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