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Eternity MAG

By Caroline W., Markham, Canada

(Inspired by Twilight by Stephenie Meyer)

It’s strange that I never noticed how fast clouds move before. It was sort of frightening. I almost felt like running for cover, as though they might lose control and tumble from the sky and crush me. I might have done just that had I not been so comfortable where I was, lying in the sun in a lush meadow.

I turned to look at the beautiful, ageless being stretched on the grass beside me. His looks were deceiving, for while he appeared to be a normal teenage boy, I knew he was well over 300 years old and not human at all.

“Nathaniel,” I said, my voice sounding loud in the calm of the clearing.

“Mmm?” was his only reply. His eyes were closed and a lazy smile graced his lips as he soaked up the sun.

“I want to see you.”

He opened his violet eyes a fraction, peering at me with a look of amusement and adoration. Then, he closed them again and let out a long breath. Slowly, he started to change. The color in his skin faded until he was all white, except for his lips which remained a pale rose, and his hair became an impossible shade of black. He sat up and a set of filmy, sparkling wings sprouted from his back, the light bouncing off,sending rainbows dancing around the meadow.

I pushed myself into a sitting position and grinned when he opened his eyes, now a deep purple.

“Much better,” I said, and his lips parted in a breathtaking smile.

He lowered himself onto the grass,holding his head up with his hand, his face turned toward the sun. He looked so perfectly at ease and so easily perfect that it was hard to believe he was even real. He was so lovely that it hurt to think of what he saw in me. The ordinariness of my humanity couldn’t possibly be endearing compared to the fantastical beauty of this faerie boy.

Yet there he was, utterly content to be with me. I wasn’t sure I’d ever understand, but I didn’t mind.Having him was more than enough. To ask for an explanation would be greedy. Still, I had to wonder if there had been others before me. After all, he’d been alive for three centuries. Certainly he hadn’t spent those years alone. It hurt to think of others holding his heart, and that others would, because, of course, I wouldn’t be around forever. I would grow old and die, and he would goon.

But if he loved me as he said he did, would he be able to goon? Would he survive after I was gone? Were our positions switched, I knew I wouldn’t be able to exist. Now that I knew what it was to be with him, I don’t think I’d be able to live without him.So, did the thought of being without me frighten him? Did it scare him to think he would live forever?

“What are you thinking?” he asked softly, looking at me with curious eyes.

“Well,” I said, mirroring his position and propping my head on my elbow. I took his hand and flipped it so his palm was facing up. Running my fingers lightly up and down the inside of his arm, I looked at him. “I was wondering if it ever scares you, the thought of living forever.” I saw him frown.

“That’s a strange thing to think about.”

I shrugged. We’d long ago established the fact that my mind didn’t work the same way as everyone else’s.

“Does it?” I prodded.

With a sigh, he wrapped his arms around me.

“Sometimes, yes, the thought frightens me, mostly because of how inconceivable it is. When does forever stop? Does it stop? How do you measure an eternity?”He paused, I assumed, in thought. I saw his lovely face tighten with anguish and confusion and sorrow. “No one can even say for sure when it began. Some say billions of years; others say millions, and others believe thousands. If we don’t know where it started, how can we know where it ends?”

I’d never heard him voice his thoughts so freely. He growled in frustration and the sound was loud in my ear, sending shivers down my spine.

“Or if it ends at all! What if I just go on infinitely? What if my family and others like us never truly die? What if I am doomed to walk this Earth,to exist in this universe, ...” His eyes closed with some ancient emotion I could not comprehend.

“Forever?” I whispered.

His gaze came to rest on me and I propped my head upon my forearm, which was folded over his chest. And then his eyes met mine. The sorrow, the pain, the turmoil, the deep, heavy woe in his eyes broke my heart several times in that fraction of a second. The emotions were so strong, so inconsolable, that they shook me to my core and before I knew it, tears rolled down my cheeks. It wasn’t until I felt him wipe one away, his fingers as light as a moth’s wing,that I even realized I was crying.

I felt it, though. I felt the emotions reflected in his eyes. I felt them deep in my chest, weighing heavily on my heart, choking me. I felt the total impossibility of his existence. The uncertainty and the forlorn question of what his purpose was. I felt it all, and I nearly exploded with grief. All of the heartache bubbled over and my body shook with sobs.

I felt his arms form a loving shield around me, although the anguish was his, and not mine. I should have been protecting him, consoling him, but I couldn’t hold myself together.

A soft, soothing melody came and I realized Nathaniel was humming. My heart swelled with love and a wave of ease flooded me. I clung to his shirt, wanting to be as close as possible. I wanted him to know I was there with him. His hold on me tightened and I felt him press his face into my hair.

“My lovely Delilah,” he whispered. My name on his tongue sounded wonderful, and I wanted him to say it again and again. Reluctantly, I lifted my head from his chest and the sad smile on his perfect lips brought fresh tears to my eyes. “So absurd,” he muttered,stroking my cheek with his thumb.

“Nathaniel,” I sighed his name and my voice cracked. “I -”

His exquisite lavender eyes softened and he pulled me up so that my face was level with his. He pressed his cheek to mine and said softly in my ear,“What is it?”

I pulled back to gaze at his sinfully gorgeous face. Hesitantly, I traced its contours, his smooth brow, his lavender eyelids and the circles beneath them, the bridge of his nose,the planes of his cheeks, the angles of his jaw, his soft, soft lips. I heard his sharp intake of breath and the way my name floated from his lips.


In his eyes I saw are flection of my own longings and it made my stomach flip.

“Nathaniel,” I whispered. “The thought of you ... alone forever ...” my voice trembled and I buried my face in his neck. I forced back sobs as his hands traced soothing circles on my back. I shook my head, unable to finish my sentence. I hoped he understood.

His arms enclosed me completely and he held me so tightly that I was sure I’d fall into him. Except it wasn’t tight enough. It never seemed to be. I could never be close enough to him. He pressed his cheek to my hair and I heard him inhale deeply. He sat up and I stretched my arms as far as they could go around his chest,my fingers splayed across his back, making sure not to disturb his wings.

I wasn’t sure why, but my eyes were shut tight.Maybe I was afraid that when I opened them he wouldn’t be there.How would I live without him? He’d have to move on in a few years for people would notice that he never aged, and then what would I do?

I breathed in his sweet scent and tried to commit it to memory. The thought of him having to go through infinite lifetimes in pain was unbearable. I’d only have one life without him;he’d go on eternally.

“Delilah,” his voice washed over me and warmed my heart. “Look at me.” I couldn’t disobey and leaned back to gaze at him. His eyes were full of such intensity that I melted in his arms. I leaned in and his lips met mine. He kissed me hard, harder than he’d ever kissed me,and I knew he was pouring his heart into it. I was, too.

I smiled against his mouth and felt him do the same. My grin broadened and I leaned back to look at him. His mouth spread into one of his glorious crooked smiles and I brought my hands to my face, my cheeks hurting from the strain of smiling. I laughed breathily and shook my head.

“What?” he asked, his voice husky, his lips still stretched in a smile.

I shook my head again.“It’s embarrassing.” What was I supposed to tell him?That his smile made my insides turn to mush?

He rolled his eyes good-naturedly and said, “Everything with you is embarrassing.” He grabbed my chin and drew my face closer to his.

“Tell me,” he breathed, and I was temporarily dazed.

I also totally lost all of my resolve. “Your smile,” I started.

“Yes?” he prompted.

“I love it.”

His grin grew into one of triumph and I pouted at having given in. He placed a kiss on my forehead and then on my mouth.

“I love you,” he whispered against my ear. I brushed his obsidian hair away from his forehead and smiled down on him, my face no doubt glowing bright red.

For some reason I laughed, then said quietly, “I love you, too.”

If possible, he smiled more breathtakingly than ever and pulled me to him.

“Those words from you will bring me happiness forever. No matter how long forever may be.”

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on Nov. 14 2013 at 10:22 pm
Deej6595 BRONZE, Billerica, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I--I took the one less traveled by, And that has made all the difference.

This is a good romantic short story. It is a perfect way to end it.

on Aug. 2 2013 at 9:43 pm
lostloveXalexisX GOLD, Neosho, Missouri
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i love this it is AMAZING you should check out some of my wotk

on May. 28 2013 at 2:48 pm
ElaineEL27 GOLD, Fayette, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
These violent delights have violent ends
And in their triumph die, like fire and powder,
Which, as they kiss, consume. The sweetest honey
Is loathsome in his own deliciousness
And in the taste confounds the appetite.
Therefore love moderately.

I will be honest. I do not think much of Twilight, admittedly more because of the movies and less because of Stephenie Meyer—I have far more respect for her than I do for the actors and directors. However, I truly enjoyed this. I think it's wonderful that you used a work and made it into something arguably better and unique. :)

Animegymnast said...
on Apr. 15 2013 at 10:50 pm
I love this!!! Absolutely amazing (the events that happened and also how detailed and descriptive you were! I felt like I was reading an experienced author's work!)

on Jan. 20 2013 at 7:18 am
SimranRazdan GOLD, Hyderabad, Other
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this was EXACTLY like twilight except the names and the fact that you really did turn edward into a shiny pixie(haha). sorry but i think you stretched the term "inspired" a bit too much.Romance is a beautiful genre with emphasis on writing style and story. with the kind of talent you have, you can do a lot better than copying off twilight even though you say its "inspired"  

on Jan. 18 2013 at 8:55 pm
musicluvr3 GOLD, San Diego, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Cry. It shows you care."

I loved this so much! The description in this piece is just amazing. So much emotion is packed into it, and it makes the piece very powerful. It reminded me more of the Fallen series more than Twilight, just because of the wings. If you haven't read the series, you really should because they are amazing.

on Dec. 29 2012 at 8:38 pm
In_Love_with_Writing GOLD, Easton, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me." Phillipians 4:13

It was nice. I wish there could be a lot more action than description, even though that's what made the story its story. You could have wrote about how they walked through the meadow and described the scene or something like that. I found myself feeling a little restless while reading through all the description, which is a danger zone. While you have no obligation to satisfy me, just take it into consideration if you want to.

on Dec. 20 2012 at 12:42 pm
FloridaGeorgiaDirectioner SILVER, Talking Rock, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
May the odds be ever in your favor.

Please write a sequel! I fell in love with this as soon as i started reading it! It's just as good as Twilight!

. said...
on Dec. 20 2012 at 11:32 am
I love you wrok and  the way you define Nathaniel made me love it even more

4tisimo1st said...
on Dec. 12 2012 at 11:00 pm
I really loved this piece! You are an amazing writer and I know what it is like to not be with the one you really love. Plz look at my work, The Music Store by 4tisimo1st!

KylieK GOLD said...
on Dec. 12 2012 at 2:55 pm
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

Well, i think i have a bit of a crush on nethaniel! Write a sequel, please! You should change it around a bit to make it more original, and make it a novel. No joke. This is (i would underline the word if my ipad would allow it) captivating.

on Dec. 7 2012 at 9:43 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

Beautiful. I'm in love with your vocabulary :)

. said...
on Dec. 7 2012 at 7:30 pm
This piece is incredible! You are very vivid with your words, and you should keep writing!

on Nov. 17 2012 at 9:13 pm
DanceOfBlades PLATINUM, Springfield, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Humankind cannot gain anything without first giving something in return. To obtain, something of equal value must be lost. That is alchemy's first Law of Equivalent Exchange."

OMG! You had me this crazy captivation over Nathaniel! Just everything you wrote about him, his eyes, the way her name 'floated' off his lips, and his smile! Man, this was just such a breathtaking piece! 

Trees BRONZE said...
on Nov. 17 2012 at 12:37 pm
Trees BRONZE, Billings, Montana
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Favorite Quote:
Everybody wants to go to heaven, but nobody wants to die. How is that?

..... THAT WAS JUST WOW!  I hate the story Twilight, but this was amazing.  You really know how to write.. so keep going!

on Sep. 19 2012 at 12:45 pm
JMoyes17 BRONZE, Park City, Utah
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goon haha 

Wong27Mable said...
on Feb. 6 2012 at 5:03 pm
I strictly recommend not to hold back until you earn big sum of cash to buy all you need! You should just take the personal loans or student loan and feel yourself comfortable

Keeta BRONZE said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 3:59 pm
Keeta BRONZE, Lehigh, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
the past cant be changed so live in the present.

this is one of my favorite stories! it makes me cry just about every time i read it.

on Dec. 27 2011 at 10:40 pm
Def_Leppard_fan120 SILVER, Lake Lorane, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
If you want your dreams to come true, Make them come true. If you want to win, Make it a win.
The only one that is stopping you from accomplish your dreams is YOU.

Check out my article called THE BATTLE by Def_Leopard_fan120 and leave a comment on what you thought about it

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on Nov. 11 2011 at 3:20 pm
Art94 BRONZE, Columbia Heights, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
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Wow! This has amazing imagery and creatvity...You really know how to describe something but in a facinating way...Keep Writing!!!

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