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Summer Storm: A Twilight Continuation / Spin-Off

June 19, 2010
By Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn


My name is Summer. I am a vampire. The non-human killing type or "vegetarians" as my new family says. We survive on the blood of animals. It keeps us strong enough, but there are times when it's a struggle.


I'm 18 years old - really, I am. There's no going back. So, forever young and forever unchanging I'll stay. Sometimes this way of life can be difficult. The thirst is always there no matter how often I try to quench it. My family is teaching me how to control the desire for human blood. Unfortunately, that desire is part of being what I am -- an immortal.


The night air whipped my hair into my face as I ran through the woods and down onto the beach. The stars lit up the sky for miles. It's my favorite way to cleanse the mind. I come here every night to think and reflect and just exist.


My eyes wandered across the sand and came upon this mass a mile or so from where I stood. I decided to investigate. It's not like I couldn't spare the time.


As soon as I got close I froze. I didn't need to get any closer to identify the mass in front of me. The scent of the human was overwhelming and I wasn't prepared for the onslaught. This wasn't just one of those times when our way of life is a struggle. It was like nothing I've ever experienced. I didn't know what to do. What if the human was hurt? I couldn't just leave. The remaining traces of humanity wouldn’t let me walk away.


My thoughts were in jumbles trying to figure out my options. Just as the burn in my throat was becoming unbearable my eyes registered movement.


The human raised its head and I could now see that the “it” was a boy. I placed his age to be around mine. I could identify all 1037 people in this town by face and name, but I’d never seen him before. He looked right at me then and his eyes, which were the loveliest shade of blue I had ever seen, connected with mine. I was distracted by the beauty of his face and I unconsciously moved closer.



For once I was glad I would be around for all eternity, if only to look into his eyes. I didn't move or allow myself to breathe. It was too risky.


His mouth was agape with awe. I know I must look strange to him as my kind does to humans whose senses aren't as in tune to the way of things.


My skin is pale white, which contrasts sharply with my dark brown hair. My eyes are golden because of the animal blood, though they are probably closer to black now as I haven't hunted in a few weeks, and my face is very appealing to the human eye. These features are just part of the design. My kind is the most dangerous predator to humans.


I just hoped his instincts to be wary would help me keep from doing something I'd regret. That hope died the second I saw the muscles in his leg twitch just before he took a step in my direction.


"Uh, hello," he said with a mixture of wariness and curiosity in his voice.


I saw he was staring at me waiting for a reply. But speech simply wasn't possible at the moment. I was still frozen when he spoke again.


"I'm Max Storm. You are?" He asked with what seemed to me like shyness.


Although I heard his words I wasn't paying them strict attention. A vampire can think of multiple things all at the same time you see. And we're easily distracted. At that second my mind was busy fighting the urge to breathe. This confliction made me realize that I rely heavily on this sense. Even though it isn't necessary to my survival it helps me to “taste” the flavor of things.


"Uh, I'm new here." He said it as if he were asking a question.


I couldn't answer without letting down my guard. If that happened I could kill him and for some reason that was beyond even my comprehension I desperately didn't want that to happen.


"I thought I didn't talk much." He muttered more to himself than to me. He wouldn't know that my hearing is phenomenal of course.


I wondered why he was out here on the beach this late at night.


Then he took another step toward me. Did he not realize how dangerous I was?


Up close I could really see how handsome he was, but what caught my attention was his face. It was intriguing. I forgot myself and inhaled.


"You're very beautiful." Max breathed as his eyes fully took in the sight of me once he could see me more clearly thanks to the illuminating moon.


Suddenly the wind changed course and blew his scent in my direction.


It was --- intoxicating.


My eyes found his pulsing jugular, where the blood in his veins was most visible.


"Ahhh," I had to get out of there and quick! I forced myself not to run and risk exposing myself or my family.


My fists clenched tightly. I forced myself to turn away from him; from the scent that made me want to kill him. The thirst in my throat was raging and demanding to be satiated. It would be so easy. All I had to do was walk up to him; place my lips on his neck and…no! What was I thinking? I had to leave before I exposed my secret; before I could hurt him. I started walking back the way I had come.


"Wait! I don't even know your name. Please?" he called after me.


I didn't stop. It was too dangerous. Selfishly, I wanted this Max to know my name.


"Summer," I said.


I took off running at full speed as soon as I reached the cover of the woods.

The author's comments:
Ch. 1 of Summer Storm. This is from Summer's perspective. As my title says, it is supposed to be a continuation or a spin-off of the Twilight Series. This IS from my own imagination, but any and all Twilight related material belongs to Stephenie Meyer.

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on Jul. 8 2010 at 1:22 am
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
23 articles 1 photo 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn

idk what is taking so long for Ch.2 to be approved. i've got 8 different things waiting to be approved, so idk if that slows things down or not. urrghh! But hopefully it will be up in the next few days cause it's already been a week. i'll let everyone who has posted know as soon as i'm notified.

on Jul. 4 2010 at 7:53 am
emoVamp247 BRONZE, Port Saint Lucie, Florida
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hey i went on your account and i love most of the stuff u love i think that we could be best freinds we have alot in common 

on Jul. 1 2010 at 9:52 pm
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
23 articles 1 photo 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn

thanks for commenting! this chapter is really the only part of the story that is extremely similar to Twilight in plot / character connection. I chose to have Summer react similar to how Edward did when he met Bella b/c thirst (for human blood) is the one thing "vegetarian" vampires have difficulty with, especially if one's scent is particulary pleasing.  Chapter 2 will reveal a new angle to the plot. And I do want to say that Summer & Max's story is going to be a lot different than Edward & Bella's.

on Jul. 1 2010 at 9:36 pm
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
23 articles 1 photo 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn

thanks, I'm glad you liked it. if you haven't read my other comments, chapter 2 is awaiting approval. the first part took about a week to be posted, so i'm hoping ch.2 is up by Monday or Tuesday. i love your username by the way. Vampires rule!

on Jul. 1 2010 at 8:03 pm
McClellan95 BRONZE, Rolling Meadows, Illinois
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I like it alot, but its sounds A LOT like Twilight. I know its suppose to be a continuation, but its way too similar. Try to change up the scene where Summer and Max met.

on Jul. 1 2010 at 7:38 pm
emoVamp247 BRONZE, Port Saint Lucie, Florida
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i cant wait to read the next chapter this is really good i love it.     :)

on Jul. 1 2010 at 10:36 am
AnnaNana PLATINUM, Corinth, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
Live the way you die- All of a sudden: That's the way to go.

okay, i kinda figured you would change and i'll be sure to read the later chapters

 


on Jun. 29 2010 at 9:51 pm
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
23 articles 1 photo 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn

i think i understand what you're saying now. 

after she sees Max and his scent infiltrates her relaxation her mind kind of goes into overdrive. because she can think of so many things at the same time she has a lot to deal with: controlling her extreme thirst, feeling a connection to a human, not wanting to expose what she is, or disappoint her family. So my intention was to make her thoughts seem like they were rapidly firing.

i hope that helps


on Jun. 29 2010 at 9:40 pm
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
23 articles 1 photo 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn

Well, let's see if I can explain my reasons without confusing things. lol

I did reverse the Edward and Bella characters in a way.

Obviously, Summer is a vampire where Bella was human. However, Summer is still a very young vampire whereas Edward was not. I wanted Summer to have characteristics of both for reasons that will be revealed in a future chapter.

You will find out more about Max in the next chapter, which is awaiting approval, so I don't want to give anything away. Let's just say that there is a lot more to Max than meets the eye.


on Jun. 29 2010 at 8:11 pm
Green8a8 SILVER, NY, New York
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Favorite Quote:
im the author of my life, unfortunately im writing in pen therefore i can't erase nothing about it.-by some crazy friend of mine

this is really good i thought the way you describe the emotions is powerful in its own way

i can kind of relate this to twilight, but it seems like the characters change possitions, as if summer is edward and max is bella, (am i right?) anyway it seems interesting like hearing another side of a story good luck and great job =D


on Jun. 29 2010 at 7:54 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Part of the J7X team. :)

Ahhh, okay. It'll be interesting to see how they fit in.

The words seem not to flow too well during some parts for me. It could be the way you intended it, because she was nervous though.


on Jun. 29 2010 at 7:29 pm
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
23 articles 1 photo 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn

I'm glad you like it! the first two chapters don't seem Twilight related because the Cullens and the incorrigable Jacob Black haven't made their appearance yet, but they will soon.

what exactly do you mean by choppy? like there isn't enough detail or explanation, or things don't flow together... chapter 2 is already waiting for approval, but i'd like to know how i can improve anything for future chapters. Thanks for commenting.


on Jun. 29 2010 at 7:20 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

This is better than a continuation. Barely any of this is Twilight related, but it's really good. It's a little choppy, but not that much.

I can't wait to read the next chapter, keep up the good work!


on Jun. 28 2010 at 3:08 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

I will be:)

on Jun. 28 2010 at 3:41 am
Chinadoll BRONZE, Dallas, Texas
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Well I'll be waiting in the woods until that happens. :)

on Jun. 28 2010 at 2:39 am
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
23 articles 1 photo 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn

thanks, that's saying a lot coming from you since your stories have such vivid descriptions!

Ch. 2 is written and tomorrow, or rather later today, I will be editing it and then submitting it for approval. So be on the lookout...


on Jun. 28 2010 at 2:36 am
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
23 articles 1 photo 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn

thanks! don't worry if you don't know too much about the Twilight series b/c I will explain anything Twilight related in as close a manner as possible to Stephenie Meyer's descriptions, or my interpretations of them anyway. I'm really just borrowing some of her characters and setting anyway. Dialogue and the main storyline are completely original.

on Jun. 27 2010 at 11:46 pm
Chinadoll BRONZE, Dallas, Texas
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Wow this is awesome! I'm still getting the twilight vibe, but still great! 5 stars! 

on Jun. 27 2010 at 9:03 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

This was great, especially the descriptions--can't wait to see how you make it your own.  Please write more!

on Jun. 27 2010 at 8:57 pm
xcrayolaxstormx SILVER, Coventry, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't worry about it." -V.Z.

Cool :D Can't wait! Haha ;)