15-Minute Wait for the Results This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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Skinny bird legs lying next to mine.
The one rubbing my thigh is tapping
up and down and up and down
because you are nervous about something.
Your finger, the one with the big red plastic ring,
is tapping on the peeling dark veneer rhythmically.
Tap-a-tap-a-tap-tap-tap-tap-a-tap
Your other hand is so clammy.
Like a turtleneck on a hot day,
like a wet turtleneck on a humid day.
The salmon-colored plastic sticks to my upper arm
in the small space between us on this love seat,
peeling away from my skin when I shift
with a sticky sound. Ouch.
There’s a rip, all jagged with
school bus-colored foam poking out.
Your nails are digging in,
as short as they are.
You are so afraid.
My nails are digging into your hand as well –
I can see the red-lined moons standing out plain as sight.
What was that old saying?
Red sky at night, sailor’s delight?
Or was it take warning?
Does a moon make the night red?
I ask you out loud, you laugh,
this queer little laugh
that isn’t a laugh at all.
Not really.
And you say it’s the first.
So we should delight and dance together like
we were doing just last week under that
tacky disco ball.
The door opens with a creak that reminds me
of an old haunted house. It’s all meant to scare.
The doctor walks in – shuffles really – lab coat knocking against his knees.
He’s kind-looking and old. Like a grandfather. Or uncle. Or something.
He moves past us.
Sits at his desk.
Pulls on his glasses – his eyes look so big.
Pulls out a manila folder.
Opens it.
Turns the page. Again. Again.
Licks his lips.
Takes glasses off – his eyes are small once more.
His chin rests on his folded hands.
Pensive.
“The test was positive.”
Your grip tightens, my grip tightens.
Many red moons across our hands.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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Sasha S. said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 2:39 pm
hey you wrote this really well can u or someone else who reads this tell me how long did it take for u to get a conformation email tht ur article was posted to the site?
 
acc13a replied...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 6:57 pm
I posted an article about a month ago. it used to be under the tab "my work", but faded and labeled "pending approval," but yesterday it just disappeared. it isn't listen anywhere. anyone know what's going on?
 
Katie1234 replied...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 7:24 pm
if it had been approved people probably reported it. If it had still been pending to begin with, it was probably dissaproved.
 
Brook_little_obbsessive replied...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 8:09 pm
It takes me 1-10 days 10 MAX
 
imrighthereyouknow replied...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 11:08 am
How are some articles posted in a day? Mine always take at least two weeks, but usually more like three weeks, or a little over three weeks.
 
ReenSmiley said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 1:55 pm
Nice writing and description. Keep up the good work
 
twilightfan101 said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 12:32 pm
Great job!!!! It blew me away.... it was so mysterious. keep writing please.
 
Nora.Whatever said...
Aug. 8, 2010 at 8:48 pm
blew me away. keep on writing.
 
bookworm29 replied...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 6:05 pm
the first thing I thought was, "Was it a sickle-cell disease testing?" because I read "red moons" so ya.... Was it?
 
Collado92 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 8, 2010 at 5:39 pm
I agree and I reallly like this peice REALLY good job, keep writting. =)
 
socrchik33 said...
Jun. 25, 2010 at 8:30 pm
this was so good!! please please write more i need to hear more!! btw anyone who sees this can you look at some of my work?? thnks! :)
 
notebookgirl said...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 7:13 pm
in my opinion this piece should not have a sequel. the best part of it is the almost tangible mood of excitement fear and anticipation. actually giving the fear a name might an almost anticlimactic effect, but if you think there should be a  sequel for it I'm sure it will be amazing
 
swimster23 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 11:10 am
pretty please continue!!!  have the test be for something really unexpected to the readers, not like a pregnancy or cancer test. im not sure what but make it something else. the beginning is too good for you to let it turn cliche!  :)
 
Aelita said...
May 12, 2010 at 10:09 pm
amazing detail- but.. WHAT WAS THETEST FOR?  You should write a sequel that explains that...  Keep it up you're really a good writer!  Your peice was almost more like a poem, you should look into writing some poetry!
 
Yoyo96 replied...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 11:51 am

Im pretty sure the test was a pregnancy test because the author said "its the first" and "we should dance again like we did last week"

its almost like they wanted to celebrate something even tho they were nervous about it. Pregnancies are the only thing i can think of that fits that profile- you wouldnt wanna celebrate HIV....

 
Aelita replied...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 8:12 pm
You are probably right...  I don't know, though.
 
Addison J. said...
May 12, 2010 at 4:06 pm
this was really really good(: but i have to ask, was it a pregnancy test or something else?
 
AussieLover said...
May 12, 2010 at 2:50 pm
It's REALLY AMAZING! love all the little details and dashes of foreshadowing....never stop writing:)
 
outofyourleague This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 12, 2010 at 1:55 pm
that was good [:
 
shaniab said...
May 12, 2010 at 1:43 pm
Wow, that was really interesting. I really was wondering what exactly was positive. I wish I could've known but Im guessing as well. Something, like Pregnancy or HIV.
 
jman13 said...
May 12, 2010 at 10:19 am

Interesting

 

 
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