Modern Gladiator

August 11, 2016
By M501athletic GOLD, USA, Other
M501athletic GOLD, USA, Other
19 articles 22 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is never too late to have a new dream- C.S. Lewis


The day has finally arrived. The day I signed up for. The day I was going to become a Gladiator. Years ago in Rome, they ended the Gladiator trials. But then our new governor, Governor Kore, brought it back. He also brought the Latin language back to life. And now that is the first language for everybody in Rome. I brushed my wavy hair and tied it back into a ponytail so that it wouldn’t be blown against my cream colored skin in the ferocious wind. I then brushed my teeth and washed my face so that I could feel fully awakened. My armor was already hung up on my bathroom door a few weeks ago. My mother had surprised me with it the day before I signed up to become a Gladiator. She knew that I wanted to be one, one of the best ones. I would bring riches and honor to my family.

After I took my shower, I strapped up all of my belts and buckled up the laces in my sandals. My sword was strapped onto my armor and my golden chain that represented my status as a beginning Gladiator was tied around my neck. All of the rookie Gladiators had one so that they wouldn’t be mistaken for a professional. After I ate breakfast I took a stroll through the streets to walk off the anxiety I was feeling. I still had a few hours before I was off to the arena. As I walked I bumped into my friend Cassidy Hurley. She would never dream of becoming a Gladiator even if her life depended on it. She was interested in things like art and baking. But we both were friends nine years ago when we were seven and have been friends ever since. She spoke to me in Latin.

“Hi Gloria concitatae sunt dies istos ? An paulo timidus ?”
In English she said “Hi Gloria, are you excited about your big day? Or are you a little nervous?”
My name is Gloria Perez, I am sixteen years old and have trained to be a Gladiator ever since I was ten. It has been my passion to fight for my family. And bring everlasting wealth to our household.
I answered back as we proceeded through the crowded streets.

“Sum valde timidus magis excitatur. Succedam ego scio quia manebo dum focused fortemque Cloanthum.” (I'm extremely nervous, but even more excited. I know that I will succeed as long as I stay focused and brave.) She spoke next.

“Multum desideramus et fortasse unum par vidi unum de diebus istis non libenter.” (I will miss you a lot, maybe I could see one of your matches one of these days when I am not studying.)

She then nodded and walked away without saying anything else. She knew I would be different when I came back. She knew that I would no longer be the kid from across the road. She knew that this positon would change my life forever. I was going to become a modern gladiator, and she probably would never see me again if I didn’t survive.


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Ths is just a littl piece I was working on. Tell me what you think and then hashtag #Review so I can review your work as well. Thanks!


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on Oct. 24 2017 at 7:29 pm
M501athletic GOLD, USA, Other
19 articles 22 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is never too late to have a new dream- C.S. Lewis

Hi! Great tip!
It was supposed tp be a twist with modern and old. The modern part was the fact that the story takes place in this day and time, but their ruler is trying to incorporate the vintage ways in the modern world. Thank you so much for taking the time to comment!

on Oct. 24 2017 at 7:29 pm
M501athletic GOLD, USA, Other
19 articles 22 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is never too late to have a new dream- C.S. Lewis

Hi! Great tip!
It was supposed tp be a twist with modern and old. The modern part was the fact that the story takes place in this day and time, but their ruler is trying to incorporate the vintage ways in the modern world. Thank you so much for taking the time to comment!

on Oct. 24 2017 at 7:29 pm
M501athletic GOLD, USA, Other
19 articles 22 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is never too late to have a new dream- C.S. Lewis

Hi! Great tip!
It was supposed tp be a twist with modern and old. The modern part was the fact that the story takes place in this day and time, but their ruler is trying to incorporate the vintage ways in the modern world. Thank you so much for taking the time to comment!

on Oct. 24 2017 at 1:56 pm
authorteen198 BRONZE, United States, California
4 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Can you remember who you were, before the world told you who you should be?" -Danielle LaPorte
"Chin up princess or the crown slips"

I really liked your story. Though if I may add a few tips, try to include more modernistic things next time to make it seem as though she is, you know, modern. If you hadn't told me this was a MODERN gladiator, I would have assumed that this was about the old times. Maybe some stuff about how her armor is modernly built with futuristic additions. But great article! #review

on Aug. 24 2016 at 6:21 pm
M501athletic GOLD, USA, Other
19 articles 22 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is never too late to have a new dream- C.S. Lewis

Thanks! I just posted a review on your article as well!

on Aug. 24 2016 at 4:16 pm
RachelPOV. BRONZE, London, New York
4 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Difficult roads often lead to beautiful destinations

Great piece, I love the modern twist you put on this and great structure. Check out my work TeenInk.com/reviews/book_reviews/article/913479/Dead-Time-by-Anne-Cassidy/ thanks

on Aug. 21 2016 at 11:47 am
M501athletic GOLD, USA, Other
19 articles 22 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is never too late to have a new dream- C.S. Lewis

Thanks so much! Yeah I do tend to switch back and forth like that a lot, and need to make sure I correct that. But thanks so much!

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on Aug. 20 2016 at 9:05 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

This is a really cool and unique idea! However, be sure to be consistent with your tenses; you tend to frequently switch back and forth from past to present tense. Also, try to show more and tell less! Instead of simply telling your reader what's happening, show them through imagery and actions from the characters. This is very interesting to read though; keep writing, and you'll go very far. :)

on Aug. 18 2016 at 10:41 am
M501athletic GOLD, USA, Other
19 articles 22 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is never too late to have a new dream- C.S. Lewis

Thanks! I will make sure to review ur work as well :D

on Aug. 17 2016 at 9:58 pm
Blackjack. GOLD, Suffolk, Virginia
13 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Take a lesson from "the Greatest Man That Ever Lived," Austin Aries. The ambition and vision of one depends on how bad@ss they look in sunglasses." - Me, 2017

"Who is this Jose, and why is he always being denied?" - Corey Graves, 2016

Another great piece from you! Keep up writing! #Review

on Aug. 16 2016 at 6:26 pm
M501athletic GOLD, USA, Other
19 articles 22 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is never too late to have a new dream- C.S. Lewis

Wow! Thank you so much guys!! I will make sure to review your work as well. Yes lol i came up with the names on the go. I tend to do that or look up names. Thanks again and look out for the review. :D

on Aug. 16 2016 at 2:09 pm
Sliced_Bread BRONZE, San Antonio, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 9 comments
Wow I really want to know what happens next! I love the fact that you incorporated actual latin language. Gratz on holding the #1 spot for a while! #Review

HammadWaseem said...
on Aug. 16 2016 at 1:29 pm
HammadWaseem, Lahore, Other
0 articles 6 photos 287 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be proud of who you are.
-Eminem

You can't see me
-John Cena

Ooh, somebody stop me!
-Mask

Thats amazing @M501athletic will you check and comment on my teen ink work named "The Unbeatable Breakdancer"? :)

on Aug. 16 2016 at 1:21 pm
This is very well written, creative. This may seem weird but did you already have names in mind or did it take you a while to come up with them. I know it takes me hours to come up with names for everyone. Very good work though. #Review.


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