Beneath The Ice

January 29, 2011
By grahamsta97 SILVER, Medford Lakes, New Jersey
grahamsta97 SILVER, Medford Lakes, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"William, I am trying to listen to you, but it's so difficult because of that hair! Every time I look at it, I expect racist Disney characters to leap out of it and start singing about living on the balliou!"
-Jane Lynch, as Sue Sylvester on Glee :D


I feel the ice beneath me crack, a sound cutting like a chainsaw, and I freeze. My best friend, Cailey, and my boyfriend, Chad, hears it too, and their heads snap toward me. All conversation is ceased, and the silence hangs in the air like a melting icicle. The terrified looks on their faces show they heard the crack. It was too loud for them not to.
“Chad,” the panic is clear in my voice, and the frightened call rings out in the still February air. I try remaining as still as possible, trying not to shift my weight.
I hear Chad’s calm but tense voice, trying to give me directions, but it’s drowned out by a deafening crack, and then all I hear is a whoosh and then a splash. Somewhere in those seconds, I heard Cailey’s scream, but then I can’t remember if I screamed either. Cold enclosed around me like a blanket. I desperately clawed for the edges of the ice, but I was already sinking too fast. I fumbled with the zipper on my jacket, and ripped it off, but it still wasn’t enough. I reached down at my ice skates, trying to untie them with my shaking hands, and I was able to yank them off, and they sunk towards the bottom of the lake. I shot upward, my lungs exploding, my hands reaching upward towards air and warmth and Chad...
Thunk. My hands smack ice. I pound on it with my fists, trying to break through, but with no success. The ice stays hard, cold, and unforgiving. I scream, letting a series of bubbles fly up towards the ice, never to really surface. The freezing water finally paralyzes me, seeming to freeze me in place, and I feel myself descending. I was done. I had no air left, and I drifted, waiting for death to close its arms around me.
Somewhere in the distance I hear a splash, and I see a beautiful figure swimming toward me, and with the energy I have left I reach out my hand to this mysterious guardian angel before the blackness that had threatened since my plunge finally claims me.


The author's comments:
Ever since I was little, I've been fascinated with writing about underwater scenes. There's just so much detail that you can put in, and it's thrilling.

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on Feb. 28 2011 at 7:49 pm
grahamsta97 SILVER, Medford Lakes, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"William, I am trying to listen to you, but it's so difficult because of that hair! Every time I look at it, I expect racist Disney characters to leap out of it and start singing about living on the balliou!"
-Jane Lynch, as Sue Sylvester on Glee :D

thanks barbie:) <33

 


on Feb. 28 2011 at 5:34 pm
Colleenxoxo BRONZE, Medford, New Jersey
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Your a really great writer (and friend). I love the detail.

-xoxo Barbie


on Feb. 1 2011 at 4:18 pm
grahamsta97 SILVER, Medford Lakes, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"William, I am trying to listen to you, but it's so difficult because of that hair! Every time I look at it, I expect racist Disney characters to leap out of it and start singing about living on the balliou!"
-Jane Lynch, as Sue Sylvester on Glee :D

haha of course! :) and thank you so much! the only thing is how do i view someone else's work?? i just signed up so im new to the site...

on Jan. 31 2011 at 5:55 pm
grahamsta97 SILVER, Medford Lakes, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"William, I am trying to listen to you, but it's so difficult because of that hair! Every time I look at it, I expect racist Disney characters to leap out of it and start singing about living on the balliou!"
-Jane Lynch, as Sue Sylvester on Glee :D

thanks so much! it means the world to me :)

and i have some other pieces if you wanted to see them...


HamzahQ SILVER said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 5:17 pm
HamzahQ SILVER, Carteret, New Jersey
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This is really good and interesting write more i would like to read more from you


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