If Looks Could Kill...

July 27, 2010
By SeeIfYouCanCatchMe SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
SeeIfYouCanCatchMe SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Seriously. If you're going to ask me to put a favorite quote give me at least 1000 characters. This will have to suffice.

"Me without you is like a sneaker without laces, a geek without braces, a sentencewithnospaces."


PROLOGUE

"But what of the training?" Gray was desperate for a positive answer.

"She will rebel and cause distress within the community. The effort is futile." Mayer was stock-still and his voice was deeper than usual.

Gray turned his attention to the council. "Mayer has been wrong before." Mayer shivered at the mention of his name. His eyes were no longer glassy and far away. He was securely in the present. He took a moment to process Gray's statement and when comprehension came, so too did anger.

"That man was clearly trained to hide his future. I paid dearly for that mistake if you don't remember." Mayer cried in his defense.

"As did I." Gray turned to Mayer and slipped off the glasses from his face and looked straight at Mayer. His eyeballs were milky and unlike Mayer who could come back to attention, Gray was surely blind forever.

The lead councilman cleared his throat. "It being that Demitria is but a child and cannot guard her future, it would seem that Mayer's premonition would come into fruition. We must use the Draught to guard our society."

Gray felt the urgent need to defend Demitria. As pointed, she was a child. But now she was to never know of her family or the world she lived in. She would be weakened to a fragile state and banished from the society. But challenging the lead councilman was a profound waste of time. It was hopeless.

A sad cry barely slipped from his lips. A cry of the loss of his beautiful daughter, Demitria.


The author's comments:
This is totally unedited and a work in progress. I know it's confusing and stuff so it's not going to make any sense. But it'll end up being a good story...hopefully. :)

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on Oct. 5 2010 at 11:30 pm
bluesky0728 SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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Oh, I get it... it was like midnight when I read that the 1st time, but I actually tried 2 understand it this time. This is really good!!! Finish it! 

on Sep. 21 2010 at 7:30 pm
SeeIfYouCanCatchMe SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Seriously. If you're going to ask me to put a favorite quote give me at least 1000 characters. This will have to suffice.

"Me without you is like a sneaker without laces, a geek without braces, a sentencewithnospaces."

um, i was going to keep going but i got sidetracked...

on Sep. 21 2010 at 12:18 am
bluesky0728 SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 0 photos 107 comments

I like the flow, but.... what???

-em


on Aug. 7 2010 at 7:09 pm
SeeIfYouCanCatchMe SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Seriously. If you're going to ask me to put a favorite quote give me at least 1000 characters. This will have to suffice.

"Me without you is like a sneaker without laces, a geek without braces, a sentencewithnospaces."

Well, I plan on posting more but I'm not sure how long it will take.

on Aug. 7 2010 at 2:11 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
14 articles 1 photo 279 comments

Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

very interesting.  would definetly keep reading.  are you going to post more?

Zzzie SILVER said...
on Aug. 6 2010 at 10:02 am
Zzzie SILVER, North Canton, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Think positive, or I'll have to start singing."

Interesting prolog. If you put more of the story on this websight, I'll be sure to read it. Keep writing!


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