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Trapped

February 8, 2009
By Perfectionist47 BRONZE, Eureka, California
Perfectionist47 BRONZE, Eureka, California
2 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Trapped
I'm in and open hallway,
The ceiling high above my head,

The fluorescent lights flicker...
over and over, making my head spin,

People gush out of their classes,
oozing around me.

They're just mindless chatterboxes,
immune to out locks and cages,

I gulp in the infested air,
the oxygen suffocating me!

The door is right in front of me-
my free-ticket to life.

I need to get out, and-
my hand twitches on the knob,

but I cannot make myself open it...
I'm trapped.


The author's comments:
I wanted to generalize the way everybody feels at least once in their life. I placed my poem in a certain situation so I could make it more powerful though. Please comment on what you thought about it!

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on Mar. 19 2009 at 3:58 pm
SillySarah BRONZE, Covert, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Live today as if there is no tomorrow.

I like this, it seems so true like a real situation and so calming.

ChildOfGod said...
on Mar. 15 2009 at 2:31 am
That was really good!

I could feel it in a way...

Keep writing!

missusE said...
on Feb. 23 2009 at 2:21 pm
You made me jump into the situation. I could understand the emotion. Everyone feels this way!

on Feb. 21 2009 at 3:28 pm
Weightless2015 GOLD, Roselle, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Dream with my eyes open, sleep when I'm dead, love who my heart's chosen, and conquer what lies ahead." -Ryan Follese (lead singer of Hot Chelle Rae)

I know what you mean

DJC said...
on Feb. 20 2009 at 3:29 pm
This was a wonderful poem! I felt like I was "trapped" too, with all the great imagery!

susanits4u said...
on Feb. 20 2009 at 2:26 am
I love the imagery in this poem. The teen years are supposed to be the "best years" but I feel you describe what every teen feels at times - trapped in a situation which we can all identify with. Fabulous!

Analise said...
on Feb. 19 2009 at 9:36 pm
I really liked this poem! I think I even liked this one more than the other one, and I LOVED the other one! Keep on writing poems, you are AMAZING at it!

on Feb. 19 2009 at 9:24 pm
Perfectionist47 BRONZE, Eureka, California
2 articles 0 photos 11 comments
Please comment on my page! Also, check out my poem "To Become..."


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