Impede, Recede, and Concede MAG

December 26, 2008
By meggyt BRONZE, Cranford, New Jersey
meggyt BRONZE, Cranford, New Jersey
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My heart does not beat for you anymore.
It powers down, ensuring no emotion.
I dare not surrender to your poison potion,
But flee from wounds which time could not restore.
What a pedestal that has been set,
An unyielding power coarse hands caress,
Fear lurks beyond confidence, I confess.
My own faults shall remain my own regrets.
I bestowed you with height, attesting me weak,
Recoiling behind acts of defiance,
Gives notion your battle will not succeed.
I accept our relations, we need not speak,
My heart need not beat, nor inquire alliance,
Tonight I impede, recede, and concede.


The author's comments:
This originally began as an English/Italian Sonnet mixed, but I ended up messing up with the rhyme scheme. I gave it to my teacher anyway. She will probably think it is an act of laziness that I did not take the time to adjust my rhyme scheme mistakes. Yet, sometimes, like people, poems are just better flawed.

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on Apr. 25 2010 at 11:12 am
Grasshopper007 GOLD, Hamilton, Other
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Despite the rhyming, I thought it was good! It's difficult to write a really good piece of work with rhyming involved- you're right, sometimes things, like people are better off flawed! Congrats!

on Feb. 7 2010 at 7:25 pm
MangoMoonlight BRONZE, Newton, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Perfect is the enemy of good"

This is a really good sonnet. I have read so many on this website that are not correct sonnets, and I am refreshed to see a proper one! Thank you for showing the Teen Ink world what a real sonnet is. Bravo

on Jan. 14 2010 at 1:32 pm
Ashleykimiko BRONZE, Honolulu, Hawaii
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great use of words! raw emotion behind the poem! you have a very strong voice!

on Jan. 14 2010 at 10:33 am
hi what's up

on Nov. 9 2009 at 5:56 pm
RitaChristine BRONZE, Metcalfe, Other
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What a rich piece of work! Wonderful! I love your use of language, and imagery, rhyme, near rhyme, alliteration, rhythm... the list goes on! I admire when a writer can fit so much into one small poem. I great example for the rest of us of excellent poetry. Lovely.

on Nov. 9 2009 at 7:54 am
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

Wonderful job!!!! you are a talented writer and keep up the good work! if u have time please check out my poem called "Sensitive Am I" and rate and leave a comment. Thanks and keep writing!

on May. 16 2009 at 2:44 am
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

I love it- the wording, the rhyme scheme.

on May. 14 2009 at 1:49 am
LikeBam! SILVER, Myrtle, Missouri
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love it! please write more

KiKi3 SILVER said...
on May. 13 2009 at 7:29 pm
KiKi3 SILVER, Toledo, Ohio
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I love your poem. It rocks!!!!

on May. 11 2009 at 11:52 pm
val@yahho.com BRONZE, Hastings, New York
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thats good ignore your teacher its fine they will get over it

on May. 11 2009 at 10:59 pm
MisunderstoodBeauty BRONZE, Cincinnati, Ohio
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really good

christon said...
on May. 11 2009 at 6:34 pm
this poem is really good u should keep em commin

on Apr. 18 2009 at 5:46 am
Pamela Pozos BRONZE, Cicero, Illinois
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Just letting you know i read your poem, and hope i can write in past tense about love as well. i rate it a 5 =]

cullen|lover said...
on Apr. 14 2009 at 3:58 am
great poem

TissaB BRONZE said...
on Apr. 13 2009 at 11:43 pm
TissaB BRONZE, Sheridan, Illinois
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i deeply believe you are a true poet! you should check out mine when it is finnally approved its called "Lovers Creek" it is kind of the opposite of yours because its about well death for love ish well you can find out yourself. lol

on Apr. 4 2009 at 3:01 am
francheeze88 SILVER, Oak Park, Illinois
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YOU TELL HIM! This is amazing :) Check out my poem called Thief, its similar.

Shadow SILVER said...
on Mar. 20 2009 at 2:57 am
Shadow SILVER, Sacromento, California
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I love this poem It makes me think amy dad

P.S.

I like your comment at the end.

on Mar. 16 2009 at 5:34 pm
mmodeusher GOLD, Shreveport, Louisiana
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I think its fine the way it is...The BEST poets create their own rhyme scheme, Ya Digg!!!

on Mar. 15 2009 at 5:10 am
lexikeys247 SILVER, Forks, Washington
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i love it! im gonna sound like such an over analyzer or something but i loved you alliteration!

on Mar. 14 2009 at 8:16 pm
its insane how many people relate to that.i personally understand the part about not speaking and not wanting the emotions anymore.everyones wants to know that they are not the only ones that feel that. so thanks for being brave.and there is no such thing as a flaw evveryone and everything is PERFECT!


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