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Rewritten Sonnet 148

Girl, you be lookin’ so very fine now,
Them others say you is ugly, They wrong;
If dey right... , you is fine, you be so wow,
You so good I could write a perty song.

What dey be talkin about? Dey so slow,
You is more fly and swag den fiddy cent,
Cuz you is swagalicious, you is mo’e.
But is you real, is you someone so bent?

How is what I see right, love is trippy,
I so stuck, What be right? You or not you?
I wonder why you be so, so slippy,
I cain’t see who you is, you or who?

O trippy girl, you is a slippy girl,
You ain’t worth no diamonds or a nice pearl.



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MissExplorationThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 1, 2013 at 4:44 pm:
This is a really different style of a Shakespearean sonnet.  It seems to convey a similar message as Sonnet 148. However, you may want to fix some spelling errors and grammar and it would still work the iambic pantameter, yet the style in this poem is more like a rap and filled with slang.
 
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WallypenguinThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 1, 2013 at 2:42 pm:
This is the product of my laziness. We had to rewrite Shakespeare in our own words while keeping the meaning the same. This way I could commit all sorts of grammar mistakes to make it work with iambic pantameter. :-)
 
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jazzwarrior said...
Jul. 31, 2013 at 5:18 pm:
What a clever idea...I never thought of rewriting Shakespeare's poetry. I might have to steal that!
 
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