January 1, 2012
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As lovers sway in sacred courtship’s dance,
All vow, then coyly feign disinterest,
I shadow their steps in a half-romance
My partner in another heart’s request.
I hapless wade in love’s celestial seas,
Soft bathéd in the brilliant North Star’s light,
Thou, dear Polaris, keep deaf to my pleas—
Your thoughtless scorn is my eternal night.
So darkling I wait, darkling watch thee flit
From true love’s perch to some far weaker bow’r,
And catch thee glance with shining eyes love-lit
Upon the tawdry beauty of the hour.

My love, towards thine light I would gladly sail

Though all my efforts were to no avail.

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team_haymitch This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 31, 2012 at 7:27 pm
wow. this is beautiful.
recurring_resilience said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 10:28 am
Well written but i couldn't make much sense of it.. Maybe because I'm tired. >.
vetenari replied...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 10:29 am
Thanks for your input!
vetenari said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 5:05 pm
Please rate and comment(with honesty)! I really appreciate your feedback!
followthezoraida said...
Jan. 6, 2012 at 9:43 pm
i absolutely loved it. amazing sense of form and beautiful word choices
vetenari replied...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 6:38 pm
Thank you so much! This means a lot...
vetenari said...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 6:17 pm
Hey, all! As the author of this sonnet, I'd really love to get as much input as possible out from the teen ink community! This piece was a school project in which we were to write an Elizabethan sonnet inspired by Shakespeare's work. Please let me know what you think in your comments and ratings. Be honest!
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