'Til Death Do Us Part

August 30, 2011
By Bronte_Elise PLATINUM, Moore, Oklahoma
Bronte_Elise PLATINUM, Moore, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"There is nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed."

Ernest Hemingway (1898-1961)


The hurt in me swells up like toxic fire,
Enveloping me in a lethal smoke.
My screaming heart is pushed into barbed wire.
The snake around my neck constricts to choke,
All to destroy the flame of burning love.
My silence screams so loud but is unheard.
My only hope is my Savior from above
To hear my cries and think me not absurd.
The lion in my chest claws violently,
Scraping at ribs to make the sweet escape.
Pink hearts turn black with frost bite fears, slowly
Caking on veins, like a most evil tape.
Pale skin turns cold with an unbeating heart.
The smoke has smothered. 'Til death do us part.


The author's comments:
This is my Sonnet, written with 3 Quatrains and 2 couplets; written in Iambic Pentameter.
This is an English sonnet that I wrote for my Creative Writing class, inspired by the abstraction: hurt.

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Atarla GOLD said...
on Sep. 20 2011 at 9:12 pm
Atarla GOLD, Portland, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
Everything happens for a reason, And nothing is without one

Your very welcome ^-^

on Sep. 17 2011 at 10:08 am
Bronte_Elise PLATINUM, Moore, Oklahoma
25 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed."

Ernest Hemingway (1898-1961)

Thank you! haha :D

on Sep. 16 2011 at 11:20 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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i must saw for me to read a poem and have my eyes glued to it word for word is a challenge, but u have succeeded !

on Sep. 16 2011 at 5:28 pm
Bronte_Elise PLATINUM, Moore, Oklahoma
25 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed."

Ernest Hemingway (1898-1961)

Thank you so much! That means a lot to me! :))

Atarla GOLD said...
on Sep. 15 2011 at 1:38 pm
Atarla GOLD, Portland, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
Everything happens for a reason, And nothing is without one

I ment to say, "It's one of my favorites thus far.

My bad =)


Atarla GOLD said...
on Sep. 15 2011 at 1:37 pm
Atarla GOLD, Portland, Oregon
11 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everything happens for a reason, And nothing is without one

This amazing. When I saw the title I was hoping the phrase didn't get ruined but to my surprise, if anything, It enhanced it. This as amazingly written and I love it. I use to have the phrase with my EX boyfriend "Till death do us part" and sure enough, what you described in poem happened. I really can't say enough about this poem other then It's not one of my favortes thus far.

Keep up the good work. I hope to see more from you ^-^





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