More Than What You See

July 12, 2011
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When you look at me what do you see
Well I think people see different things
But do they even see the real me
I don't really think they do because people right of the bat think I'm mean
Or they think I'm a push over so they can do whatever they want to me
I don't know why people think so many things
When none of those things are me
I'm a nice person as long as your not mean 
I have feelings so I don't like when you tease me
I have ears too so I hear what you say about me
You sound like you know everything when you say those mean things
But you must have the wrong person because your description doesn't match me
For one I like boys but just the nice ones
Yes I'm fat but I don't eat much
I have acne but I don't think I'm ugly
I may be quiet to you but I have friends and hobbies
So whatever you think I am I guarantee it's not me
I guess I'm more than what you see

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MelanieRoland said...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 12:41 am
It made me realize it's not how you look the outside, its meant in the inside and people are blind to see who you really are. Its a really nice poem! 
silver_ice said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 10:11 pm
wow great imagery! i can envision the kid sitting in the lunchroom all alone thinking this poem but never speaking aloud because he/she is too shy... you've capture it perfectly :)
zone7494 replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 10:21 pm
thank you I appreciate the compliment
dashi said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 4:45 pm
That was great. It really shows people how shy kids feel. You definately need to keep writing this opens the door to so many people that just because someone says their something doesn't mean they are. They're themselves and no one other!
zone7494 replied...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 5:59 pm
thanx you totally felt what I was getting at
Mystiecub said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 9:41 am

I cant tell if this was meant to be a sonnet, but they're generally 14 lines long--no shorter, no longer. (Not trying to be an annoying critic just providing some feedback)

But overall, this is a really nice poem. It relates to how a lot of people feel. Prejudice is a silent killer.

zone7494 replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 1:03 pm
thanx for the comment I didn't take the criticizing as annoying you just helped me to be better writer
Mystiecub replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 1:39 pm
lol no problem, i find that some people find it offensive though thats why i said that :P
zone7494 replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 4:37 pm
maybe you could read my other poems called addicted and poetry speaks they just got posted so tell your friends and all that stuff
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